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Old 10-24-05, 06:12 PM   #1
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Hell On Earth

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Closely with my peers wandering the streets at night
Suddenly an outburst exploding street the sky turns egg white
Arising from below creatures of satan have spawned
Running for their lives my peers were suddenly gone
Watching in aw no further movements in my body
These creatures arising from the ground were the opposite of godly
Oddily watching hell take over the lonely streets of detroit
Creatures hazing people, but im untouched i feel a sense of exploit
Invinsibly froze standing in an odd pose as hell takes over
Operation has been taken as an exorcism of god its now over
Unfrozen in the instant as i take shelter to be un hurt
Quickly swarmed with hells demons screaming with outburst
Not believing the circumstances i am given a quick pinch to the skin
As i begin to revolt for i will not stand to see hell win
People start gathering surrounding me with help
Being battered and beatin by these demons nothing but pain is felt
Seeing this is going nowhere i retriet for safety on my LIFE
Pondering about my future no distinctive plans to survive
Looking up to see demons and the master demon in the flesh
WithOut thinking I ask him whats the cause for this infest
Answering with no thought well whats your sudden interest
Fearing for my life no response in return as the demons lead the way
Needing my soul for the extinction of god Thinking i will not live to see another day
Why is god not helping if he is about to be put to rest
Being irrational Satan lashes out, asking why i ask...no response at his request
Ready for extinction as im raised above the contraption
Hearing yelling in the backround but my mind is now lacking
The screaming gets louder as i open my eyes to see this devias kon
But opening my eyes not seeing the devil..but worse...its my mom!

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Old 10-24-05, 07:38 PM   #2
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upping upping for feed for feed
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Old 10-24-05, 09:48 PM   #3
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very emotional drop man, the ending was very suprising, imagery was good also, flow and structure were pretty good also, keep it up man
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Old 10-24-05, 10:13 PM   #4
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this was a quite decent piece man,you had nice imagery which is very important,you had okay emotion could of been stronger,the concept is semi played but still cool,u also had a average vocab for this piece...stay up man-decent shit
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Old 10-25-05, 01:06 PM   #5
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Word this was a pretty decent drop...your vocab and wordplay was pretty decent , good imagery and nice feelings ...it could have been alittle better..but it was good,Overall this was a pretty good drop... but it could have been alittle better ..keep it up
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Old 10-26-05, 03:15 PM   #6
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thankz fo the feed uppin
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Old 10-28-05, 11:49 PM   #7
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uppin......./////
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Old 10-29-05, 04:24 AM   #8
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i still want to battle u but for real this shit is tightr i no how to give respect this is good shit
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Old 10-29-05, 06:04 AM   #9
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The worlds were still, heartless and fill with darkness
No creatures living the features unforgiving no smartness
No streams to blend not even a team of men the place empty
A disgrace simply to exist in this form just a brisk storm of wimpy
Mass floating and promoting nothing good time for a godly session
No law imperial just raw material waiting to be shaped for manly profession
No strategy or aggression and that bought a battery of questions
To god after an odd grave storm god gave it form with blessings
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Old 10-29-05, 01:23 PM   #10
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ok nice nice.....uppin...
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