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10-30-05, 04:44 PM
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IP: 78CC AA55
thanks Im feelin that.........upppin......i will rtf later
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10-30-05, 05:45 PM
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Ya mom massages my nuts
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IP: D4CB 508F
Yea ok...ya flow is def improving..but its basic.......rhyming is basic........the story is basic......an very expected...stories like this dun impress becuz we've all seen movies like this an heard rap songs like this over & over in our lives so its really easy to write a story of this nature.....it really lacked an element of surprise as well..the way u told story I pretty much knew what was gon happen next...didn't really have a plot twist......delivery was koo wit the kinda whispering but need to be changed up from time to time to be entertaining..u over did it wit the phone filter...quality was betetr than some of ya other shit..overall not bad but coulda been wayyyyyyyyy better
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10-31-05, 12:40 AM
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IP: 2E43 6BFE
Aiight Flow is decent needs some work but meh...like trip said im not feelin tha concept if you use this type of direction ina track im lookin for you to KILL it...delivery is aiight coulda been switched up though...overall track was decent keep doin yo thing son..=1=
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