lol @ this being your first and only post, anyways this piece was bad man. you didnt rhyme half the times, you had some stretched lines, no flow really, the rhyme scheme was fucked up and well you still got a whole lot of elevation to do, but just keep at it cause we all start off somewhere, but WTF @ your phone number at the bottom?? thats not a good idea man.. hahaha, but I guess this was meant to be audio or something, I'd have to hear you spit this to really judge it well, cuz textually it isnt that good..

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