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10-28-05, 08:25 PM

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PayDay

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Your flow was good... It was easily rapped... my only suggestion would be to quit fucking with open mics, and put this shit to audio... haha... good looks mane... keep up the good work... holla... oh... 8/10

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10-31-05, 11:25 AM

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hey thanx. gimme links and I'll rtf

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10-31-05, 11:33 AM

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Mad Dog

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When there’s trouble this kid is always in the middle
Not intentionally and by nights he soaks his pillow
With the tears he’s tasting his importance was so little
Solving his life problems but was twisted like a riddle
He’s only 15 and it seems he’s lived half of his life
Nearly killed twice for merely trying to do what’s right
So he begins to write and putting the truth in every line
Wording was misery and implication was “I’m not fine”
Struggles to write but continues to intensify the rhyme
How to survive he figures that he will never simplify
Life is a challenge that he didn’t understand why
People think that everything can be solved with a lie
He learned how to survive when starting without a sign
Choices came like a buffet but struggled to decide
Goes back out and now he is hit and given damage
But he knows they won’t fuck with the hidden image
He’d rather be hated for being him than being loved
For what he’s not even if it comes with kicks and shoves

This story is actually about me and what I went through and now that people know I'm real I get the exact opposite of what I got in this topical. I hope ya'll enjoy it cuz I worked real hard.

Looks like a Sinner drop lol...keep droppin

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furthermore, june 3rd is the only good day to be born

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i'm still tryin to figure out how bein born in another country makes somebody fake.

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10-31-05, 11:34 AM

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Macca

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no surprise that MD would reply. he loves me. MD is such a fag. and yes I'll keep droppin. lol

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10-31-05, 11:35 AM

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Mad Dog

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no surprise that MD would reply. he loves me. MD is such a fag. and yes I'll keep droppin. lol

actually the crit behind that was what i meant...tortured style...where's the beef there...go back to beef thread...we'll continue there

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furthermore, june 3rd is the only good day to be born

^ Amen Brother ^

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i'm still tryin to figure out how bein born in another country makes somebody fake.

R.I.P OMB

To Be Honest...I Don't Know Why I Bothered

10-31-05, 11:36 AM

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Macca

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ok fuck face. yor only making me laugh.

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10-31-05, 11:37 AM

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Mad Dog

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ok fuck face. yor only making me laugh.

i'm here to entertain...till 5pm GMT

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Originally Posted by High Dro

furthermore, june 3rd is the only good day to be born

^ Amen Brother ^

Quote:

Originally Posted by ∆ P E X X

i'm still tryin to figure out how bein born in another country makes somebody fake.

R.I.P OMB

To Be Honest...I Don't Know Why I Bothered

10-31-05, 12:14 PM

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^^lol @ misinterpretation n takin shit to heart..
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this was a good piece but couldve finished stronger in my eyes
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best line-
He’s only 15 and it seems he’s lived half of his life
Nearly killed twice for merely trying to do what’s right
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10-31-05, 01:51 PM

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50Cal.

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decent drop here.good emotion but i think you need to serious up your vocab on your pieces.it will make them stand out so much better on your works.basic and simple is a good way i seen describing this which isnt a bad thing always.it was good but could be better.still i see potential in you.

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10-31-05, 05:57 PM

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thanx ya'll. I'll rtf.

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11-03-05, 11:17 AM

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uppin...........I'll rtf

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11-11-05, 03:01 AM

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uppin...... CALI is dope.

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11-11-05, 06:42 AM

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These rhymes are like door slams they make noise so
Fake boys get locked out when I drop clout so poise yo
Like a speaker my voice loud and clear plus I make a choice
The crowd cheer as my style appear stallion like a horse
Like surfers I lounge on beaches and be around leeches
That suck blood, duck scrubs so tight with money they screeches
Don’t test my pride I’m ill like pesticides, suggest you hide
While I spray crops and stay hot plus pray a lot before I collide
With these insects, folks got louse in their house that itch
Like a bitch one squirt of this Hot shot your home switch
To livable, look it like loveable people I try be kind with rhyme
But end up a crime design now doing blind time behind bars of slime
A freak thug with hope and got deep love for folks but lost my mind

11-11-05, 11:42 AM

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you little fag. go post that shit in the forums. not my thread.

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11-11-05, 05:58 PM

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I didn't really care fo that shit at all, but since I'm goin through similar things, I guess I can say somethin.

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