uhm yea nice poem overall....uhm cant find da rhyme scheme.....vocab was good tho......need to realllllllllllllly work on da rhyme a lil bit....otha than dat....good job

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you obiously have no idea what you talking about........but anyway thanks for dat feed....uppin

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