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oh dear god at u wreckin dis dope ass shadowville beat

the effct on ur adlibs is stupid, its mixed so ur adlibs n overdubs r louder than ur main verse. delivery is better but still forced. lyrics r poor, flow is boring - cnage up the rhymescheme stop jus rhyming end words, chuck a lil complexity in there to keep me interested. using a sample was an easy cop out of a hook, and i think this beat begs a dope hook. and now this MC rhyma kid is even poorer. his verse is mixed so low its ridiculous...wtf...who mixed this track, they need a slap...get rid of the talkin,it dont fit and sounds poor. and the way us ay "holla" is jokes.

me and some MC's r mekin dis shaowville beat 4 my 21st Century Warfare mixtape. in 4weeks ull hear how u cudda done sumin dope on this beat.

RTF on sumin done by me or MDog. 1
MTP 2006.

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But im elevating right?...............

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^Don't pm me askin for advice n shit. (@ unf) I gotta concentrate on makin myself unbelievably dope first.

Your elevating i suppose, i jsut think ur being a dumbass about it. This entire trackIN MYOPINION just sounds like a rush n bosh job, sumin i dont do when making a track unless im under immense pressure to knock sumin out 4 a deadline. I gurantee this track took u about 3hours or sumin, especially as dta shadowville beat aint been up long. if THIS took u 3/4 days: den QUIT rap...blud,take ur time...spit5.6times on the beat, experiment wid ur flow..everything about the way u wrote to this, i bet if u sent me da lyrics to this on msn id spice dem up in a matter of minutes. Try be original, loose the 16 hook 16 hook 16, god damn played as fuck structure on evry track. ur delivery sounds forced to me, cos i still feel u aint rappin naturally, u sound like ur tryina imitate a jae millz battle delivery or sumin to me, and the fake yank twinge on ur voice pisses me off, cos u cant pull it off especially wid the way u mixed ur vocals. if u cant mix, which u cant send em to sum1 who can, who can mix it 4 u. the way i think about makin tracks and saying their completed is would i be proud to hear that shit stream thru the airwaves, if i woulndt be..i re-do and re-work....as 50said "if shit aint dope , and ur makin it 4 urself. keep that wack crap in ur home niggaz"


MAd Thug Productions..2006 bitches.

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ta for the feedbak, Acuity shhhhhhh. You quote Fifty Nuff Said Yeh i kno ma vocals were low, ill re-record n make them louder its coz ma mic settings r fucked up. coz ma cousin was recording he must have moved them about stupid cunt anyways.. cheers again

Aight thanks....Yeah it took me like 2 hours

lol.. i thought that was how long it normally took people

but thx ima keep that in mind man

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listning.....................
beat is hott

flow is ight...........

lyrics r nice........

deleivery ight

quality ok

samples illy:
secnd guys low

overallnot a bad track not as good as state of mind but still nice

7/10 werd

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^^Word Thanks

I Used Lyrics From A Different Track

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listening..man i was usin this beat...intro is a lil gay sounds like u giving a BJ to rhyma..dubbing is messed up...flow is nice..delivered okay...but dubbing sucks man,,,make this track 10 times worse...sounds like dope quality but the dubbing is shit..and these lyrics are pretty fake no hate..but u talkin bout a hoood..u aint been in a hood man..thas annoying....waitin fo rhyma..like ure flow dawg...u doin pretty nicely..presence not good..delivered nice tho...

UNF - flow was good..lyrics were okay..delivered dope..presence not gr8...dubbing fucked u up big no no...6.5/10 for u...dubbing moved u down from 7 to 6.5

Rhyma - flow was nice...delivered nice..presence wasnt gr8...but loved ure flow 7.1/10

UNF work alot on the dubbing...but other than that it was fine

Rhyma work on presence...otherthan that gd job

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