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02-20-06, 05:51 PM | #1 | |||||||
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times get harder
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as times get harder add more salt in my wounds
scratching at the surface underworld send your goons busting from the underground still you runnin now lil s straped wit a vest never the lest forever i rest in piece times get harder for my family to eat dig in the garbage to feast baby at the bottom eating his way out like a beast i come wit the sickness sicker then sick sliker then slick never no witnesses lack of luck is what you get for fucking with my pistols kids flipping wigs getting harder to live harder to give harder to swim in oceans this deep sinking under water farther then slopes steep my hopes creep a shutter in my heart beat spark heat like lighters in a dark street my bark squeeks and echo letgo my begal touch my shit again and ill take out your naval don't think im able too smack your face through this table your hearts un stable another fable from kane and able strangle you with a cable to get a clearer picture no markings rocks sparking jusus rose and still walking like in the scripture rip your intestines out your souls the on on your feet thogh mines paved in gold in slaved the nomes enraged by drones alcapone only romed in two toned fans i screw cold cans like like swollen lip glands between her boxers sex still getting hotter hitting harder then the games of hary potter |
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02-20-06, 06:41 PM | #3 | |||||||
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02-20-06, 06:41 PM | #4 | |||||||
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02-20-06, 07:45 PM | #5 | ||||||
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shit was straight dude had more potential then what it was but still dope id give it a 7/10 which is madd good your highlights were
my hopes creep a shutter in my heart beat spark heat like lighters in a dark street my bark squeeks and echo letgo my begal touch my shit again and ill take out your naval don't think im able too smack your face through this table your hearts un stable another fable from kane and able strangle you with a cable to get a clearer picture no markings rocks sparking jusus rose and still walking like in the scripture rip your intestines out your souls the on on your feet thogh mines paved in gold in slaved the nomes enraged by drones ^^^^^^^^Ill just work on flow your scheme was off at points anyway keep droppin |
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02-20-06, 10:07 PM | #6 | |||||||
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thanx bro uppin....................uppin.................... ..uppin..........................uppin............ .........uppin........................uppin....... .............................
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02-20-06, 10:30 PM | #7 | |||||||
Oye...Tu Sabes..!!
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it needs work but it wasn't bad, it just needs better vocab as well as imagery. the flow was good but the whole topic wasn't really that eye catching either....rtf
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02-21-06, 12:27 AM | #8 | |||||||
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thanx i guess uppin..................uppin...............uppin.. ............uppin..............uppin...........
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