^^^ thats great ...but i wouldn t be caught dead riding someone for feedback ive left pleanty of feed and if they wanna return it they do i wouldnt follow someone or cop an attitude for someone to come return feed jsut because i did ..ionno man do you!!!!!!

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my bad man....ill take time for ya okay???


Tony -
first 8 bars: come in loud....could be put down a few....pronunciation on official...could be better, but i understand you had to make the syllables fit....i like the breathing pattern....you work it well with it....i think i like the syckle cell line but i cant understand the last word....nice multi's tho....some metaphors that are pretty nice...voice works...i doubt you are (no offense) but you do sound gangsta so it sounds hella nice on the retro beat...

Enygma - higher voice...still lil lound....damn i like the voice levels....its nice the contrast between you too, keeps you into the track, waiting to her the other person again....niceeeeeeeeeeeeeee lyrics on these 8 bars...good play off tony, and the dog line, original and nice....a lil more breath work and you got it down good...(i can hear you breath a lil too much)

tony again - the volume dropped dramatically.....this is where you want the level at....maybe a lil higher....like .2dbs or so....nice switch on rhyme sceame....it seems to blend good....lyrics nice if you listen closely...but you emphasised things too little....and the i suggest you leave leave.....ehh, you know you coulda done better with that last line...or at least dilivered it a lil better....

last of the 4x4 enygma - good scheme....an middle of the verse switch up....interesting.....umm not ya best. but has the best line of the song...."take it to the heart like a shit on ya cheast" that had me laugh...its good to get reactions like that, something anyone can pick up....buttttttttt you blew it at the end....at the point where i start to pick you back up after the laughter...the end just seemed like you were thinking of stuff for fillers...not feeling the end

the talking during the sample needs to be lower....make it seem like backround to the sample....cuz in the foreground just sounds kinda lame....

second verse -
tony - not on you but i think yall shoulda switched up order for the second verse....ohh well, just a personal opinion....okay to the verse....first four lines are nice....the rest is ehh....from hearing the rest of the song....it seems like you didnt put the effort into those and it shows...the white mouse man thing....nuh uh...its not that good a lyric, and if you gon keep it....work on the pronuncation it didnt seem to fit....you fell off a lil here

enygma - i mean good lyrics...they are real nice is you pay attention....but hence is where my critisim is....it gets hard to pay attention...cuz almost everything was a multi....you didnt take many breaks for it to hit the listener making it kinda boring....you too fell off here


as i said before real nice track guys but the end you did fall off a bit....i know it could be better from just hearing the first verse...i mean dont take this to heart as negative tho...cuz i mean you guys got some ways to go im tryin to help you get there, but im not sayin im there, cuz i got some ways to go to get where you are....good track tho...but comon, we all know it could be better....

8/10....

if you get bored....try to revive the battle section with some votes thanks, if not....keep putting together shit this quality or better...i dont want to see yall degress any....

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Feed:
Beats Nice i like that kinda shit anyway the mixing and workout or bar switches is awesome keeps u intrested flow is on point most of the way.
Nice track

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thx for the feedback and thx jay for extending ya feedback

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anytime apoun request....

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hope it actually helped you

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this tracks' str8......tony inthe beginnin ur delivery was a lil wierd but after that shit was real cool enygma came nice did u get a new mic or sumthin overall pretty nice track

Lotsa love on this track

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Ok

Beats Dope

*headbangs*

Tony:

Good FLow,Feeling Your Emotion,Whats Wrong With The Delivery?,I Like It,Lyrics Are Koo,Feeling It.....Hmm... Your Flow Owns

Presence Is Nice...........So Is The Quality

Brrrr...THis Is Crazy

Enygma

Flows Nice As Always,Koo Delivery Suits This Beat,Emotions Nice,Lyrics Are Koo
Lol,This Is Nice,Feeling Your Presence

*runs off*

Mwahhaha

*runs in*

Tony:Good Shit,Bout The Same As First

Enygma:Yup,You Too

Overall:9/10

Nice Track

*jump's in helicopter*
*shouts:I'll Be Back*


-Pz

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OYD MAFIA

Rtf:

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=224112

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OYD MAFIA

The beats ok..

Tony had pretty good quality.. his lyrics were on point.. and flow was barely ever off

Alritey.. enygma yo fam ur quality got better lol.. no more computer mic I guess? haha.. well yea fam like always ur lyrics are very much onpoint.. n creativity got better.. im feelin the swith of every few bars.. nice..

overall good track.. the beat was aiight.. could have used better one.. but still goood..

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^^^dabatos yea the quality at this point was still off for me but i got that shit on lock now

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Thanks for all the love on this track fellas ™

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