"For the great day of His wrath has come, and wo is able to stand?"

- Revelation 6:17

It's a track off my mixtape. VTZ on the beat.

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=3826255


LINKS I FED ON:

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...t=225008&page=1

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2725424

I was gonna use this beat...decided against it


What's hot
beat...but I think it's produced a lil too loud
the hook
the energy u bring to this track


What's not
the mixing of the hook is too muffled and needs to stand out more
flow is a tad jerky...not bad tho



Overall: This wasn't a bad track bro...and the delivery on the hook was nice



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Youtube Video for my song "CARRY ON"

Thanx, I know what you mean about the beat being too loud, but when I tried keeping it lower, it seemed like the beat lost it's bite, ya know? Up.

i dled this beat...i might use it sometime but not right now you know...the hook is nice i like it alot...the feeling i get and the vibe seems like you feeling ya track....nice energy and emotion in it...


verses are nice...the lyrics are nice...the flow/delivery is nice ...im feelin ya voice and ya style in general....nice drop....


return the favor when i drop my track....I Never Listened

Wow.....I guess everyone was gonna use this beat. I also DLed it. I think your hook coulda used a little more umph. It sounded like you were bored with your own song. Also, you need to up your vocals just a little. there are spikes of your vocals that go high that you need to polish up a bit. Your flow is a little choppy too. You should try to be a little more fluid with your lyrics. Don't chop the words off, just continue to the next word. Not a bad track overall, but there are definitely areas that need to be worked on ™

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Thanx for the feed/advice. I'll try n' smoothen out the flow next time.

Up for more feed...bump...

I added the white noise at the end, I liked the effect lol. I'll take it out I guess.

lol i think everyone did this beat (including me, im workin on a trakk for it rite now)...

beat is hott of chorus, beat is a lil loud or suthin...good lyrics, nice voice, good flow, delivery and everything, good emotion too, i like the hook, it goes pretty good wit the beat...good shit jsut fix quality, ive never heard ne thing from you b4 but this shti is htot, i might have to collab witcha lol...