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Old 05-21-05, 11:04 AM   #1
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1st Open Mic Piece

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When i grab da mic i spit heartless...leavin niggas
In da darkness,see my rivas thinkin "fuck dis",
See dem run away like Nivea, they pacin,cos they
Just realised da kinda nigga they facin,yo my
Flow assimilates the full capacity of my mind,
Meanin when i flow im spittin everythin from inside,
9 outta 10 cats talk out their ass-hole,
And you think i'm gonna let dat bullshit pass? NO,
Goin on like it ain't bout da rhyme, they just
Want da money cos they wanna see the time, on da
Most expensive Rolex they can, while
Gettin blinded by da diamonds on their hand,
Rich or not da way i see it dem cats is fake,cos you
Know if you diss em on a track they would break,wid their
Head in their hands, lookin to da sky, askin
God why their career's bout to die,
Only a handful of da best lyricists,
Ever get da chance to make MTV appearances,
While you got these second rate rap game stainers,
On yo TV screen tryna sell you trainers...

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Old 05-22-05, 07:28 PM   #2
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Yo people can y'all hit me wid a lil feedback please?
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Old 05-23-05, 08:27 AM   #3
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some feedback please............................................ ...............................................
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Old 05-23-05, 09:25 AM   #4
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Aiyyo Diz Wuz Iight Sometimes It Was Hard 2 Find Da Rhymez But It Wuz A Good Read Pleaze Leave Feedback On My Freestyle In My Signature
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Old 05-27-06, 11:13 AM   #5
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kid is garbage











pick up a mic
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Old 05-27-06, 01:27 PM   #6
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true to that... u got 2,826 and u never did Om. well thats sad. anyways didnt really like this. had no point. very lil emotion. but keep trying...
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Old 05-28-06, 06:07 PM   #7
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Most expensive Rolex they can, while
Gettin blinded by da diamonds on their hand,

u from tha uk...but u rap like DipSet

post that shit in the freestyle thread...

om's should be a lil more complicated
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Old 05-30-06, 03:17 PM   #8
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ok kidd it was a little weak , u have to work on ur flow and rymes
on the plus u had good structure and ur stuff did ryme but was weak
it was a okish peice i have seen better

id give u a 5/10
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Old 05-30-06, 03:19 PM   #9
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closed

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