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Old 08-01-06, 01:00 AM   #1
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Florishing Secrets

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Florishing Secrets

An incentives were given, roughly mentioned accendants
To be murdered is not to die, the discription is different
Ending, submitted decendants, solely permiscuious pawns
Holy intially soldiers, only to live with the wrongs
Holding the piece to the puzzle, blossoming flowering lies
Peace never speaks through the muzzle, rise as the towering dies
Seeps through the cowarding eyes, leak proof in seek for the truth
To find the powering binds, all those who grief for the proof
Then given reasons to do , things of opposing religion
Never no closure when finish, hate every moment your in it
Fates getting colder in minutes, minutes then turn into ours
Hours the souls innoventions, suffering learns to devour
Reigning determines the showers, possibly hang it for last
Always a shame when it pass, honesty, a thing of the past
Making these claims for the clash, as i still look for a purpose
Unreal and crooked on purpose, be damn if i'll be a servant



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Old 08-01-06, 01:00 AM   #2
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Old 08-01-06, 09:06 PM   #3
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Uppin For Feed.
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Old 08-04-06, 12:31 AM   #4
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....views and no feed...?
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Old 08-05-06, 12:34 AM   #5
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nice shit kidd. ive seen ur previous stuff and they good too. i wouldnt say its ur greatest but its still got somethin to it. nice multies. good flow. favorite lines :

Holding the piece to the puzzle, blossoming flowering lies
Peace never speaks through the muzzle, rise as the towering dies
Seeps through the cowarding eyes, leak proof in seek for the truth
To find the powering binds, all those who grief for the proof

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nice . keep it up and rtf.
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Old 08-05-06, 02:43 PM   #6
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yeah this was nice homey lets face it I don't get responses so let me drop and you peep my verse out right?

look i walk steady and keep the chalk ready in case my glock shoot this block pollute my mind have to do plain damage to gain an advantage blood drain on a bandage if wounded
try flow best when watching protest when marching my wicked mind scribble on picket signs
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Old 08-06-06, 05:24 PM   #7
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this is ok.
I like your vocab, it adds a solid touch to any open mic. I feel in this though you rushed the end, cause it seemed to lack at the end, but either way its still cool.
My multis are better but this has some solid bars in it. I actaully spat this, and was easy to flow to, so your structure is safe.

good drop fam, one of this best ive read today.
stay up.
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Old 08-07-06, 01:20 AM   #8
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lol your multies prolly are better lol but i haven't been doing topicals that long since i've started back up but ima get my mojo back lol
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Old 08-12-06, 11:43 PM   #9
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ups. for more feed
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Old 08-16-06, 12:12 PM   #10
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Continue Feed....trying to get HoF
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Old 08-16-06, 01:04 PM   #11
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This was a nice peice man,

The wordplay kept the flow going very well through the whole peice. While the Creativty and the Imagenary kept pages of Images in my head. That good to do to us readers. I dont believe this is HoF worthy yet, but keep writing. 9-10. Nice story plot as well man loved iot.
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Old 08-16-06, 07:05 PM   #12
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Thanx homie i a couple in the works
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Old 08-20-06, 01:56 PM   #13
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Old 08-21-06, 08:54 AM   #14
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I thought I droped feed on this ! going mad,..

This was dope,.. your writing quality is very consistent, I haven't not seen
you drop dopeness !!

Vocab was well nice as usual, nice structure and flow made it all rhyme
nicely.

Dope drop fam keep em coming, stay up fams.

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Old 08-21-06, 09:57 PM   #15
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this joint was pretty tight shawty. i was feelin the imagery you had in there and some good vocab too. maybe work on the flow a little more, some lines got kinda cluttered. but it was a goo dpiece. stay up

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