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08-01-06, 01:00 AM | #1 | ||||
Within Eternity's Wither
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Florishing Secrets
IP: 28AD 5545
Florishing Secrets
An incentives were given, roughly mentioned accendants To be murdered is not to die, the discription is different Ending, submitted decendants, solely permiscuious pawns Holy intially soldiers, only to live with the wrongs Holding the piece to the puzzle, blossoming flowering lies Peace never speaks through the muzzle, rise as the towering dies Seeps through the cowarding eyes, leak proof in seek for the truth To find the powering binds, all those who grief for the proof Then given reasons to do , things of opposing religion Never no closure when finish, hate every moment your in it Fates getting colder in minutes, minutes then turn into ours Hours the souls innoventions, suffering learns to devour Reigning determines the showers, possibly hang it for last Always a shame when it pass, honesty, a thing of the past Making these claims for the clash, as i still look for a purpose Unreal and crooked on purpose, be damn if i'll be a servant It's Quick...
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08-01-06, 01:00 AM | #2 | ||||
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
Links:
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2808588 The Past.....And The Present http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2808595 Pointless OM Drop
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08-01-06, 09:06 PM | #3 | ||||
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
Uppin For Feed.
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08-04-06, 12:31 AM | #4 | ||||
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IP: 3240 794D
....views and no feed...?
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08-05-06, 12:34 AM | #5 | ||||
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IP: CF86 0039
nice shit kidd. ive seen ur previous stuff and they good too. i wouldnt say its ur greatest but its still got somethin to it. nice multies. good flow. favorite lines :
Holding the piece to the puzzle, blossoming flowering lies Peace never speaks through the muzzle, rise as the towering dies Seeps through the cowarding eyes, leak proof in seek for the truth To find the powering binds, all those who grief for the proof ^^ nice . keep it up and rtf.
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08-05-06, 02:43 PM | #6 | ||||||
Light Weight
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IP: CF74 5D3A
yeah this was nice homey lets face it I don't get responses so let me drop and you peep my verse out right?
look i walk steady and keep the chalk ready in case my glock shoot this block pollute my mind have to do plain damage to gain an advantage blood drain on a bandage if wounded try flow best when watching protest when marching my wicked mind scribble on picket signs |
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08-06-06, 05:24 PM | #7 | ||||||
Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
this is ok.
I like your vocab, it adds a solid touch to any open mic. I feel in this though you rushed the end, cause it seemed to lack at the end, but either way its still cool. My multis are better but this has some solid bars in it. I actaully spat this, and was easy to flow to, so your structure is safe. good drop fam, one of this best ive read today. stay up. AI |
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08-07-06, 01:20 AM | #8 | ||||
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IP: 0825 899A
lol your multies prolly are better lol but i haven't been doing topicals that long since i've started back up but ima get my mojo back lol
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08-12-06, 11:43 PM | #9 | ||||
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IP: 0825 899A
ups. for more feed
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08-16-06, 12:12 PM | #10 | ||||
Within Eternity's Wither
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IP: 0825 899A
Continue Feed....trying to get HoF
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08-16-06, 01:04 PM | #11 | |||
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IP: 8C16 07E6
This was a nice peice man,
The wordplay kept the flow going very well through the whole peice. While the Creativty and the Imagenary kept pages of Images in my head. That good to do to us readers. I dont believe this is HoF worthy yet, but keep writing. 9-10. Nice story plot as well man loved iot. |
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08-16-06, 07:05 PM | #12 | ||||
Within Eternity's Wither
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IP: 0825 899A
Thanx homie i a couple in the works
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08-20-06, 01:56 PM | #13 | ||||
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IP: F3DC 7738
uppin for more feed
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08-21-06, 08:54 AM | #14 | |||||
Black Poet
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IP: 860D ECBB
I thought I droped feed on this ! going mad,..
This was dope,.. your writing quality is very consistent, I haven't not seen you drop dopeness !! Vocab was well nice as usual, nice structure and flow made it all rhyme nicely. Dope drop fam keep em coming, stay up fams. 1~ |
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08-21-06, 09:57 PM | #15 | ||||
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IP: E72F 299F
this joint was pretty tight shawty. i was feelin the imagery you had in there and some good vocab too. maybe work on the flow a little more, some lines got kinda cluttered. but it was a goo dpiece. stay up
hit me back on my joint http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=233697 |
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