i agree beat seems too low. the chorus is lacking. maybe it's the mic your using i dunno. you need more emotion in the chorus though. i like the story line an content. the rhyme scheme is a little predicable. you know how to ride the beat. ending rhymes are too simple. mainly you gotta work on your emotion and swag. gotta rap like you mean it. maybe your are and it's just the mix but something is missing. i think once you go at it some more and build that confidence you will be solid i see potential it just needs to be polished. not bad keep it up.

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