A destructive mix of trials and tribulations/
Persecutions, smiles and complications/
Suicidal contemplations with every disappointment/
Success seeming within reach but efforts are pointless/
A roller coaster of emotions then it all ends/
Abruptly with no logical purpose we all tend to expend/
From the cradle to the grave is nothing but stress/
Strive to the top to become labeled as the best/
Like girls on p.m.s. the cycle never ceases/
Being on top is lonely they say the problem increases/
Dreams shattered to pieces leaving one with no hope/
Pushed to his limitations left with nothing but a rope/
People watch for you to choke and kick you while down/
If happiness is land I'm seasick and starting to drown/
Composed of no sound my life is short of harmony/
Hell bound a triple six is deeply carved inside of me/
Fed up with life now hiding from critics and pessimists/
Gripping a pistol not wanting to finish the rest of this/
Welcoming death's kiss I see the light ending my tunnel/
That's when I finally saw the purpose behind my troubles/

damn you D, pullin' ish like this and gettin' slept on, who you sleep on to deserve this? damn newbies and herbs... anyway manz, peace, props on this *nod*









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yo i gota holler at this. these are some tight flows you got here i can see why you runnin tings i cant criticise couse i cant do no better. peace

tight,hot.if only i could match yo skillzz would i criticise.this is ill keep it locked

Damm... yo man, I haven't really read much from u in the past, but damm, reading this, I think I should have...
I thought this was a hot piece...
not to long and to the point... never really trailing off bout other things...
How do I put this... your topic is not really difficult to understand, but the way your write it you make it seem more complex... I'm feeling how u put your words down... the rhyme were hot...
"Like girls on p.m.s. the cycle never ceases/
Being on top is lonely they say the problem increases "t
this rhyme stuck out for me.... Keep it up man, peace

F.Y.I- i went over this piece with domain and he is stating how, through all the troubles and pain in life that we are put through that we go through them because when we reach heaven we gain relief from all the strife. and how for all our troubles in the end there is true happiness to be found!

and yea this piec is hot yo, good luck in the topical league, "kinz" no showed! ahhhhh,im so pissed. lol.. anyways, your flow was there throughout the piece and for the difficulty and wackness of the topic they gave you, this came out great man. i know what you went through to come up with something for the topic too! so madd props for this yo!!

i would be difficult and ask questions about every line like you did to me, but im too lazy at the moment! lol, anyways good shit man, keep it up!

^lol, yea this topic sucked... no one here knows the topic and if anyone wants to give a shot at it and try to see what they come up with the topic is "That's When I Saw It"... lol... good luck.

Thanks much for all of your replies. Alias-C... I'll be sure to peep your newest piece tomorrow or Sunday. I don't get on much during weekends. I will definately be on Sunday so I'll peep it then including everyone else who replied. Sorry, I can't tonight I'm just checking up on stuff.

Cist-M... who are you man. I get the feeling that you're Madd Professor but I'm not sure. What's your old name?...

Thanks for all the replies I'll return the favor ASAP... Thanks

pz

this was ok not you best though, i almost stoped reading it cause it had those "ion" rhymes at the beggining i hate those damn things.

now could you please stop sleeping on me domain? i know you dont like me but at least reply to some of my shit!

hahaha another "Ion" MC....people just need to be another "Cat in the Hat"....just to rhyme....awww how sad
and NO!!! ya life aint hard so quit "the feeling sorry for this thug act"....haha
you live happy with ya white buddies and smoke "POT" when you get bored
nothing stuck out expect for the dick sucking from the OTHER NAMELESS MCS THAT POSTED "shit waz ill"....
anyways
work on it number #9
so instead of posting wack shit like this go change some more posts since thats the only thing u can do right....haha bitch

Peace.....
1.........

Ps: This has been another Post from Rawdeadly for "MOD BOY" to change so he can feel good about himself....lol pussy

I'm not gonna change that I'm just gonna let your ignorance speak for itself all I have to say is...

let me see you post a rhyme... THEN... and only when it's ill as fuck... I will listen to your critique...

pz

personally I agree with raw... it was a good drop, but not as good as everyone's say'n it is.. I think people are just dick ryd'n 'cause you're a mod... how'd you become a mod ne-way, one of the first people to visit the site or somethin'... 'cause it definately wasn't from skill... I've seen hotter shit from some of the more jr. members..

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LoL at tha hate.....Juss "blah" to them mu' fuckin' hata's like I do D.....Nah mean.....This was a hot drop man.....I liked this shit......

"Pushed to his limitations left with nothing but a rope"
^^^Nice line....should of said "my" instead of "his" tho....
"If happiness is land I'm seasick and starting to drown"
^^^I really liked that line right there....
"Gripping a pistol not wanting to finish the rest of this"
^^^I liked how that added to tha topic....Nice....

But keep this up duke....Peace

Wassup Man This Was Decent I Think We Both On Tha Same
Type Of Style SOme Compared To Nas But Noone Will Ever
Be Nas...This Was Decent Though And Your Wordplay Was
Pretty Nice

tha P.m.s cycle never ends was decent

And if happiness is lad im seasick and startin to drown

Check mines out if u want ..Peace

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