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Old 11-12-06, 05:23 AM   #1
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Old 11-12-06, 05:31 AM   #2
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you need to drop another link if its not here when i wake up tommorow imma close the threa
beat is on like a chinese tip lol
hook cflows well but its kind of repetative
i dont liek your adlibs
second verse seems better lyrically in my opnion

alrite reasons i wouldnt download this song
the hook is repetative but not vvery catchy
almost all of your dubs didnt sound right to me
and oh yea the beat is homo lol


ok track ive heard better from you however you def upped your quality
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Old 11-12-06, 03:32 PM   #3
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lol my bad dat
i didnt see it lmao
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Old 11-12-06, 03:42 PM   #4
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all good, Ayo can you delete the second thread I made.
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Old 11-12-06, 10:20 PM   #5
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the hook comes in. it's alright, but it sounds a little soft. you kinda fumbled over one part in your verse. your adlibs seem a little off in the first verse. the flow seems pretty nice. im digging the lyrical content. the lyrics are a little better in the second verse, but these adlibs are getting a little annoying. the beats ok. a little annoying though. the more i listen the more i like the chorus. not bad man.

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Old 11-12-06, 10:52 PM   #6
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Appreciate the feed.

Will hit your link up when I have my headphones back in this room.
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Old 11-13-06, 12:26 AM   #7
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iight, beats coming in decent so far.....intros kinda bit long....

not feelin the hook...kinda sound like mugs from cypriss hill....

ur verse is a bit low...and quality kinda muffled....flows nice...kinda hard to hear what ur saying, but i like the message from what im hearing...hooks still ehhh....libs r nice here...lol slave ship line was kinda tupacish...delevery an't real strong...u should switch something up once in a while, cuz it seems repititivesomething to keep ppls attention nah mean?


not a bad track tho



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Old 11-13-06, 04:08 AM   #8
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The Beat intro is too long in my opinion. It's an alright beat though, gets your head bobbin' once it starts going. The hook is alright, I don't think the song should have started off with it though, cause its sounds a lot better when it comes in after the first verse. I dig the first verse, you got a good flow over this beat, some good lines. The second verse is fire, wicked lyrics. I like the hook a lot when it comes after the first and second verses, but I'm not a fan of it at the start. Song fades out cool..

I think if you cleaned up the intro a bit, made the beat intro a bit shorter and found something to put there instead of the hook at the start this would be a really dope song. I've already repeated it a few times..

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Old 11-13-06, 02:23 PM   #9
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Thanks for the feed.
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Old 11-13-06, 11:07 PM   #10
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Old 11-14-06, 12:02 AM   #11
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ok lets see, beat is way different didnt really like it, intro creaped me out a bit didnt get wat u were saying, but ok first verse wasnt that bad it was decent was nice flowed good and lyrics was nice. 2nd verse sounded better and flowed nicew and the lyrics were a bit better than the first verse

decent track man

7/10 good job


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