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01-05-07, 11:55 PM | #1 | |||
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Twilight years
IP: B66A 4983
a 14 line topical batlle im having, on another site, "Twilight"
twilight/’twailait/ n. light from sky when sun is below horizon, esp. in the evening, period of this;faint light; state of imperfect understanding; period of decline or destruction the poplar tree was used for hanging in the southern states of usa black people were often lynched and reffered to as strangefruit "Twilight years"
pure beauty fading, sleepy crimson bleeding golden sky’s seems to set upon my window as I slowly say “good bye” ……………….. I reminisce my conscious kiss the songstress lips of shallow tombs A yellow moon hung as a witness somber whispers gallows tunes My mellow mood unveiling rust as shadows swing upon the wall and yet my phone is off the hook and still they always seem to call “hello whiskey ”swimming sinking….. throw my bottle to the floor shattered shards of broken glass reveal a southern promise torn, brothers seeking retribution….. not so easy to ignore battle born before my time….. I’m just so tired of this war father taught me as a youngster of the poplar and its fruit fifty years of fucking hate… until I finally learn the truth ……………….. as I sit upon his rocking chair Ive see my final dawn Twilight hour doesn’t knock …it sits and waits on your front lawn |
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01-06-07, 12:07 AM | #2 | |||
Flyweight
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IP: B66A 4983
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01-06-07, 11:26 AM | #3 | |||||||
Herb
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IP: D9F4 779F
not o bad good concept a lot of emotion fam keep uppin ya shit
" dont let ya mind follow ya lyrics, let ya lyrics follow ya mind" |
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01-20-07, 10:16 PM | #4 | |||
Flyweight
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IP: B4FF 1C13
uppin to the top...
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01-21-07, 03:40 AM | #5 | |||||||
New to RV
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IP: 68E9 5207
similar to what crime did, the concept was iight, lyrics subpar, creativity decent, set up good, imaginary good, overall decent.. keep up though.
6/10
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