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03-02-07, 12:37 PM | #1 | ||||
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Save Me
IP: 5517 4F51
It's not sadness that sings a song that lets him breathe
A man who jammed the world down his sleeve Fled on his back he fills the sky, now With words that brought a tear to my eye And tonight I'm catching angels Singin' in my head Please don't wake me Save me tonight Am I crazy or has the world turned upside down? Eyes float until the sharks come around There's one ship left on, sea This coward held the gun in the breeze Tonight I'm catching angels Singin' in my head Please don't wake me Save me tonight All of the time I watch you unwind I'm sick of the drink, but I'm... Goin' crazy. Alone in the cell It's easy to tell That all I've left Is the faintest angel's spell, no... But I'm... Crazy. Crazy... Crazy..... And tonight I'm catching angels Singin' in my head Please don't wake me Save me tonight Come on Come on, Love... And tonight I'm catching angels Singin' in my head Please don't wake me Save me You drove me... Crazy.
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03-04-07, 11:39 AM | #2 | ||||
pain is weakness leaving the body
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IP: 960E 56C5
i liked this piece... so the speaker wants to die? help me out with inerpreting it...
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03-06-07, 08:16 PM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: 4655 126D
im seeing memories of a female almost haunting him, love lost maybe or someone who left him and she is still on his mind.....
am i even on the same page? this piece was nice... so many different ways to see this. fill us in please. would love to hear the story behind this piece!
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03-08-07, 01:51 AM | #4 | ||||||
Above Originality
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IP: 3BAC BEF8
this was nice man you had nice inners and creative writing and structure..you also had some nice vocab assortion and use of emotion spread all over man.. you have been getting better..just excell more in wording it better and using more metaphors is what i suggest but definatly your getting better and stay at it man.
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03-30-07, 05:54 PM | #5 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 3F9E AEC0
i like it dawg, it had a nice flow to it and u can feel da emotion flowin out mayn. keep it up homie
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