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Old 03-02-07, 12:37 PM   #1
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It's not sadness that sings a song that lets him breathe
A man who jammed the world down his sleeve
Fled on his back he fills the sky, now
With words that brought a tear to my eye

And tonight I'm catching angels
Singin' in my head
Please don't wake me
Save me tonight

Am I crazy or has the world turned upside down?
Eyes float until the sharks come around
There's one ship left on, sea
This coward held the gun in the breeze

Tonight I'm catching angels
Singin' in my head
Please don't wake me
Save me tonight

All of the time
I watch you unwind
I'm sick of the drink, but I'm...
Goin' crazy.

Alone in the cell
It's easy to tell
That all I've left
Is the faintest angel's spell, no...
But I'm...
Crazy.
Crazy...
Crazy.....

And tonight I'm catching angels
Singin' in my head
Please don't wake me
Save me tonight
Come on
Come on, Love...

And tonight I'm catching angels
Singin' in my head
Please don't wake me
Save me
You drove me...
Crazy.
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Old 03-04-07, 11:39 AM   #2
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i liked this piece... so the speaker wants to die? help me out with inerpreting it...
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Old 03-06-07, 08:16 PM   #3
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im seeing memories of a female almost haunting him, love lost maybe or someone who left him and she is still on his mind.....
am i even on the same page?
this piece was nice... so many different ways to see this.
fill us in please. would love to hear the story behind this piece!
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Old 03-08-07, 01:51 AM   #4
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this was nice man you had nice inners and creative writing and structure..you also had some nice vocab assortion and use of emotion spread all over man.. you have been getting better..just excell more in wording it better and using more metaphors is what i suggest but definatly your getting better and stay at it man.
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Old 03-30-07, 05:54 PM   #5
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i like it dawg, it had a nice flow to it and u can feel da emotion flowin out mayn. keep it up homie
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