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04-06-07, 02:10 PM | #1 | ||||||
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IP: 3F9E AEC0
didnt get any feedbak on the other thing so i decidedto post on here
quick keystyle new to rv walkin through the maze trying to reach my goal finding the key to success watchin the truth unfold is life ever perfect never tragic i think not without conflict well never grow just give it a thought so im ready ready to face the lingering storms never trusting anybody but myself cuz their truth is deformed they lie and they tear ur soul apart cuz they dont have ur best intersts at heart so im walkin still walkin in the maze coming to another turn passing through another phase now im not even sure wat my goal is why is my mind fading in to the abyss stress deceptions and lies from close friends choking me never letting me free so i can be wat im destined to be i try to cut the rope but i cant do it alone im going deeper and the pit is encased in stone i try to claw myself out but there is no hope cuz im still choking drugs were the rope but then i see a glitter from above my parents had come to show me some love they raise me up take me high away fom the mess and moved me to a another location so i can reflect where my life was going i guess i took a wrong turn nowi thank god that i can return to the right path still fight valiently fighting the temptations and succedding to sum decree |
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04-06-07, 02:12 PM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: 3F9E AEC0
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04-07-07, 12:58 AM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: AC74 A441
Uh Itz Simple......... Has The Potential To Be Killa Shit But You Got A Long Way To Go
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04-07-07, 01:59 AM | #4 | |||||
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IP: 4A3D 46AB
Ah..It was okay. You didnt' have much vocab to speak of..and yea ^ like he said..pretty simple verse. It flowed okay, it was a interesting read. I was kinda feelin it.. elevate.
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04-07-07, 03:13 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 3F9E AEC0
thanks for the critique-like i said im new to this lol
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04-07-07, 04:09 PM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: F618 C57D
Yo,
As said before it was pretty simple and there were a few times where you needed to take out some words, because a few bars were streched... keep writin and pushing yourself to elevate your skillz homey. |
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