Axe- i was feelin pretty much ya whole verse. Opener was a dope concept worded a little roughly but still descent. The rest of ya verse was good, basically above par. overall wordplay was great. I liked ya closer as well LOL. overall not bad man.

Show-your verse was good as well man. i liked most of ya verse. i think you started off badly, and then picked it up after ya first 4 bars. I just basically wasn't feelin the beginnin. You had some pretty clever wordplay as well. overall decent verse.


i'm gon go with Axe for a more consistent verse.

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Let ME fiiiinnd ooout

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AXESHUN!
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We supposed to come original right? so I'll be scheming on this slob
Show mad...
Cuz his mom got fired from the sperm bank- for drinking on the job
Lol, creative. 1.5/2
I'll punch you aggressive this week, its my fist you be tastin bitch
& My yo momma jokes might be played, like her in relationships
Barely decent.. 1/2
When it comes to the winter I bet your mom & be in hibernation
All they do is talk shit to of-fender,bender...like the traffic violation
Creative again, but the 'bender' part was worded wrong. 1/2
They way she come up in the rooms, she just be so broadly
I mean damn the bitch so fat...
She signed up as a downer, and she gave 2 people whole bodies
Wasn't feelin this one. 0.5/2
Yo momma voice so fucking squeaky, she got the glass poppin
She the only person I know who broke, and still got fat pockets
This made me chuckle. 1/2
I can't get over her weight, literally lolz, but she gon be iight for a while
She still tryna thank BabyPhat, for turning around her life as a child
Ehhh... rewording woulda made it dope. 1/2
Real talk she ugly tho, and fag you should be in fear
Cuz your mom looking like Peter Griffin...with a beard
Filler... as a closer? 0.5/2

- 6.5/14 -

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SHOWCASE
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I shoulda lost last week right, but shit I'm still the bomb,
You can say I shouldn't be in this...
...but I said the same thing last night when I was with your mom.
Ok... and? Weak to me. 0.5/2
Dude, I'm coming through, to let mad hits fly,
You thought this would be a hoe-show...but your mom didn't swing by.
The whole concept was iffy. 0.5/2
I'll be hitting your girl and then blasting your wig,
But your mom? Yea, I would chop that...with the axe in your sig.
Ehhh... not harsh enough. 0.5/2
And then blow my load on her cranium, all at a fast pace,
So if children are blessings...
...I might as well build a church on your mom's face.
Nicely worded. 1.5/2
Yea, yo mama is such a dog kid, she's ugly just face it,
If I decided to throw the ugly stick...she would probably chase it.
Uh-uh. Not feelin this. 0.5/2
I haul ass when I'm late for school, and that's damn shit,
But when your momma tries to haul ass...she has to make two round trips.
Lol, this was funny. 1.5/2
And it's true son you'll take the win and all the votes too,
Because yo moma is so fat...they'll all be pulled by gravity towards you.
Oooh, concept was good, but the wording at the end wasn't. 1/2

- 6/14 -

Damn, by a hair...
Show had more haymakers, but Axe was more consistent

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VOTE: AXESHUN!
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