cool piece, good with the multies, and it all worked, wasn't just going with the rhyming.. would've been nice if it was longer, but i guess its hard with this style, but its not like the length took away from the piece at all.. good stuff, great closing lines too.. if i had to complain about anything, it was hard to read with the color, lol

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I apologize man, the way it looks on my screen is different than everyone elses. I just need to get the general concensus of what color is easiest to read.


And no, i could have gone on forever. It was just a quick keystyle to break out of my old niche in writing, and work towards a new one.

I appreciate the feedback though. stay up man.

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nice....seem like u did this off the top...but the vocab was on point....~1~

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