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09-27-07, 03:18 PM | #1 | |||||||
I made it and il end it
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bollocks
IP: 030C 596B
news dont amuse,booze lit my fuse,fuck im confused!
aint gota lot 2 say,its bin an unaventful day,but i still went along way to pray. str8 ballin,me bitch stopped calling,when will i stop falling? as u can see im thinking of shit,nothing decent to spit,cus at wat you c's writ! im white,love 2 fight,bite the hand that dont feed ya coz they tight. yes im bored,im pulling lifes cord,no wonder i feel ignored. wat next,pump up my pecks,then il get wrecked,il keep away from the decks. aint payed my rent,word up 2 50 cent,shame he had to be bent. eeeeeeeeeeeerrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! blackout,take my gat out,full time thats me out!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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09-27-07, 03:49 PM | #2 | ||||
-da prophit-
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IP: 615C 0516
ok u pretty much got ur sense of multies down in this one... but again ur forcing ur rhymes and just picking words that rhyme instead of creating a story to it... i suggest u check out some other rappers stuff that are well known here and see how they make storys to there raps instead of just rambiling on and on about nothing... and again work on ur structure... keep coming and keep droping.
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10-11-07, 12:41 PM | #3 | |||
сварливый
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IP: 30B6 8894
Closed. Whackness.
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