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04-29-08, 01:56 PM | #1 | ||||
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Quick Verse
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Its been running in my head. And most likely will be used for a song
Being Mean is meaningless Specialy when Karma is schemin Make you relive a scene as a victim When you lived as the one who struck em Fuck em' if they struggelin and not wantin to lend a hand Do you understand the hypocritcy of a man Watch individual strands string into rope To make you choke, for you philosphical quotes freedom of speech is non-existent Cuz you pay price if they listen Commision for you lenchen when your convicted For turning truth into truth in the booth Watch them turn false into truth with a golden tooth Ya pockets loose while theirs tight short understanding but they live high While you overseas the seas but ya mouth is dry Try thirstin for a new birth on this earth while you hunger for the first Every verse is worst that you disperse Except to the unknown listener That feels your hurt Just a quick keystyle might turn it into a verse on a 1 verse track. But jut jottin down. No struture. Juggelin concepts. Tell me wat ya think. Im gonna go feed some tracks and drop da links Holla
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04-29-08, 02:07 PM | #2 | ||||
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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3209754
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=246036
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04-29-08, 04:00 PM | #3 | ||||||
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I dont know how i really feel about this piece. in fact, i was so uncertain that i went and checked some of ya open mics in ya sig. by the way big ups on them. its obvious you have talent, but i took this as a bunch of random thoughts, which is explainable byt the fact that its a keystyle. the emotion in it was on track and it got your point across, i just feel you may have needed better word selection. an overall good drop
6.5/10 If you drop it on here as an audio, pm me the link and ill leave feed. just might need to hear it in the authors voice
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04-29-08, 05:15 PM | #4 | ||||
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Kinda hard to follow most of ya lines, but in over all respect to your past piece i can tell this wasn't really what was expected but then again its only a quick keystyle sorry for an inadequate feed but i feed according to effort.
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05-08-08, 11:04 PM | #5 | ||||||
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i think it would have rhymed better if you said
Being Mean is meaningless Specialy when Karmas in the scheme of it...... i could tell you wrote it pretty quick,im sure when you sit down and write it youll use a bigger vocabulary overall, 5/10...you did write it fast..
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