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Old 03-23-09, 06:26 PM   #1
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Johnny -

Cool verse, however it was pretty simple.
The story was cool, and it flowed very nicely.
Vocabulary, as usual with you, was above average.
A cool topical piece overall.


Murdah - Although longer, your verse may have been simpler than Johnny's.
It had a seemingly rushed style to it, but I can tell your actually getting better.
If you keep writing, you'll be able to hold your own in the league. However, Johnny edged you out here a bit due to a smoother flow and overall more enjoyable read.

Vote - Johnny
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