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07-06-09, 09:42 AM
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Isolated Freedom
IP: 15D3 63C9
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3279142
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3279143 Isolated Freedom Isolated freedom distorts my vision & breathing under lock & key so long my hairline's reseeding missed my son's birthday, even days of teething pacing back n forth, I angrily await the next feeding handcuff abrasions limit my wrists' movements the swelling decreased to reveal reddish bruises insinuating pain leds me to grind my teeth heavily still recovering from solitare..think its been a week the conception of time's irrelevant...as is my sentence 70 years for what! serving time for a tax evasion sentence What is freedom to a prisons..thoughts keep brain pounding Brains fatigued on my 19th escape plan, stuck on an island technological advices ensure I detail a plan B & C bashing my fist against the wall like I'm using T n T names not chisseled on wall..but echos down the hall prisoners showed respect even before I took the fall false flaggers are fight starters, tho most are harmless The only six figures I display are on prison garments ..........
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07-31-09, 08:32 AM
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New Jack
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IP: 15D3 63C9
upping for some feedback.......................................... ..................
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08-13-09, 03:19 PM
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IP: 30CE 42BF
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 upping for some feedback.......................................... ................. good or bad
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08-24-09, 01:40 PM
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Addicted
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IP: 9E37 1EFE
good flow nice multis, hits was there, concpts decent a all around good drop
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09-03-09, 02:33 PM
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New Jack
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IP: 15D3 63C9
good looking Mur..
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09-29-09, 02:13 AM
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New Jack
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IP: 24D2 8782
im feelin it it was all that but it definitly wasnt bad,i like your rymes and hot it flowed
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09-30-09, 01:51 AM
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Gone....
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IP: 44A4 CBC6
This Piece Was Good Here Good Vocab Nice Multi's Here And There...Also It Had Some Emotion Witch Is Always Good You Should Complete This In Audio
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09-30-09, 02:01 AM
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Whys That?
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IP: D8C9 D395
I enjoyed the read!
Could of been a bit longer and dug into the depths of the peice. But it was still a good read. Your vocab is decent, nothing mind blowing, but for a brainless audience I guess it pays to dumb it down. lol. rhymes are simple. Structure is on point and the peice flows nice. Best Line Isolated freedom distorts my vision & breathing under lock & key so long my hairline's reseeding Best Rhyme Breathing ... Reseeding Worst line technological advices ensure I detail a plan B & C bashing my fist against the wall like I'm using T n T Worst rhyme B & C ... T & T Stay dropping |
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