hey all would love ta hear what ya all think of my style or if ya even thinks i got potential--let me know yer honest opinion

thanks




I'm a phenomenal n logical-mystical minstrel-
mixin up some magical music-meltin away the media mayhem-mendin minds-movin mountains--
stoppin the megalomaniacal mysterious madmen-
from murdering the masses-
I'm meditatin not kickin asses

I'm a healer I feelher
nota dealer or a wheeler
i don't touch crack heroin or speed
cause the only thin dat does ma consciousness right
is 'WEED'
rollinit up tokinit up
takinit in
when me lungs get filled
i rest da bong on my 'Chin'
if ya redi ta choke then lets begin

my words all misty like smoke in ya face
makin ya dizzy yer lost in outer space
i'm new n i'm after first place
flowin with grace n leavin no trace

call me a rookie
see if i care
ya better beware
cause i got the stare
i'm yer nightmare,a double whammy blowin outya ears
i'm all yer fears, a freak, a ghost in the night with second sight
yer sweatin n i'm bettin
dat in yer bed tonight you be wettin

bring it on
yer gon.....witda wind i begin
blammin n slammin,shatterin glass n swearing
yer not even sure what U B hearin

so go ahead & ignore
sit back n pass
i know i've jus started
but i'm kickin yer ass

whas da matta

cats got yer tongue
you've just been hung
I see all the dung that you've flung
spittin n pissin....moanin n groanin
the title i be ownin
I'm outa my cage,a free spirited lyrical mage
so jus stay backstage
while i clear the air with some sage
a cosmic shaman ready to engage n enrage

i'm the yoda of freestyle a jedi of beats
i know yer scared cause yer hidin under yer sheets
i'm usin the force, a warhorse off coarse
words direct from tha source
with no remorse
i see ya takin notes off my discourse

step back n take in some air cause i'm here
Somebody
Everybody
Nobody
Invisible invincible actual n factual
a reality in yer face stingin like mace
yer lost withouta trace, a disgrace to dis place
heartpounding like a bass
i'm real-no deal-i'm here to steal
numba 1 without a gun
my voice the weapon my words the ammo

like a flammin arrow-cuttin to yer marrow
step down.. kiss the ground...
where i stand/creator my right hand
you've been canned n scanned
by my poetical backhand
a verbal slap leavin no gap
time to take yer nap
while I backtrack
n let yall know
I'm the Minister of Rap

cyberspaciousness is dis place of bliss
i infiltrated yer consciousness
with spiraling snakes that hiss
can't believe yer goin out like this

I'm here for the challenge friend
takin it to the end
bettin i'll be da next trend
parallel universes criss crossing yer world
I've unfirled---your brain is all curled
a matrix of memories of heaven on earth
whats it worth-----remember yer birth
yer here--for the change-rearrange-all wierd n strange
mutatin n transformatin /meditatin n creatin
you gotta a soul/yer whole /love is da goal....ya know let's go
i'll flow n glow stoppin da show you don't even know whatcha know
so let's go...
a spiritual bein you be seein
not a human doin who's spewing n
chewin you up n spittin you out without a doubt as you pout
electrifyin the air
as you stare
into the atmosphere
i'm here/yer where
that's right/yer full a fear

Ed aka s.e.n.~Da Minister

c'mon somebody anybody everybody

is there anyone here who cares ta help another freestyler
improve on their skillz...

peace

Uppin for sum critique...........


also how does everyone count the barz---how many would you say this was?


help.......

Feed me wit sum FeedBack
let me know is it OK or whack

where do I need improvin---

Hungry 4 da Wisdom

thanks

nice and long, lot of big words (don't like that) but flowed prety well, i really enjoyed reading it lol Weed is good lol some of your lines were very well put together like that check mine tho its some bullshit i made up durning school!
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=50746

mine is @ the bottome Check out dire_1 battles!

your shit was tight,u got good word play u just need to learn how to blend them together better,it was over all tight,u got well over 40 bars by the way

it was good.but the first bi made ma hjead spin lol to many Ms.........but it was tight....keep spttin yall get better even the best still learn

thanks all----good ta hear pos feedback--

my first battle sucked---came off weak----
check out my many posts and gimme yer honest opinion----I have a hard time with the punches---i guess since my fav form of music is the conscious hip hop-trance--takin ya higher kinda stuff--Arrested Development/Speech---Common---Digable Planet-
PM Dawn---------------

guess ther really isn't a form a peaceful battlin--wher yer just out spittin insteada diss'in------or maybe ther is---let me know

thanks


peace

I forgot ta put the tag for that first Battle---from what many have said so far I don't even know if I should be gettin people ta see it----burn it

MystiQuest vs sen
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...15&pagenumber=1

Uppin 4 some more feed back---really helps ta hear what everyone thinks-----inspiring 4 the Enquiring


thanks all

as 4 battling --not sure if I got what it takes---

ask & you shall receive..........

feed back ------opinion----------------perspective---------------

any advise on how to improve appreciated


so many talented souls........


peace

Thanx 4 everything

good wordplay, aight flow, nice drop overall, could have been better had yeah had more heart in it... nice overall though return the favor?

uppin 4 more feedback

spectrum of consciousness
waves of existence
A journey beyond 'FlatLand'

thanx
peace