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Old 05-29-03, 02:34 PM   #1
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My Homies story PT1

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Hey y'all wat up......i just kicked up some shit there...it aint da bomb but i think its a work in progress.....any one got any tips or pointers or verdicts post them ..feel free to say it is whack or if u think it dope say so.... PEACE


hey yo

My homies locked up with the killaz an rapest
no one allowed to vist so he aint heard the latest//
His Girlfriends pregnant, she expecting a baby
Can't have an abortion cos she seven months already//
Selling crack, dope for food in the jail
He got beaten up so badly cos he was a black male//
I know im white an i cant feel the pain
Im feelin the guilt, cos its my colour doin it, Live my life in shame//
His gangs tooken over by a pimp an his bitch
They runnin their mouth, shooting up the block like an irritating itch//
Sent him a letter describing wat they been doin
he told me to get off my ass an better start ruleing//
This was my chance to take over the block
I'D still be able to write raps like I was the white PAC//
The pimp cleared away when I showed him nine
Making money, I was now rich an my hommie was doin fine//
if being a real gangsta means im commiting a crime
Then I should be in Jail wit my homie doin my time//

Chorus x2 (singin)
Time passes me everyday//
No time for me to play//
Work hard to make my pay//
I just wanna touch the sky//
Wanna know wat it feels like to fly//
But im still here with my homie gettin high//
Gettin high.....

Little Taylor born into this world, Into this hood
I need to teach him bout the ghetto like my homie would//
Tell him bout the players , haters and the weaknesse's
Dont fall in love with a hoe , shell break you into pieces//
MY homie wont be out for his sons best years
Even though he a "G" I can still see those tears//
Taylors mother aint got no job, house or no phone
Christmas is here with no food, they are all alone//
I didnt want to see it so I took them in
Taken another mans family is that a sin//
Years gone past , the good an the bad, Taylor still hasnt seen his dad //
No other man in his life , all ladies makes him very mad//
Caught with his friends sniffing an taken drugs
Drinkin beer, like he had no fear, little taylor is down wit tha thugz


Chorus x 2


ANOther verse needs to be inputed

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Old 05-29-03, 02:37 PM   #2
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nice drop, dood word play, ight chorus and good flow... nice drop
return the favor?
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Old 05-29-03, 02:47 PM   #3
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dats nice real nice down with dis shit keep it comin and i'll wait around some more
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Old 05-29-03, 02:52 PM   #4
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yep good drop here...

looking forward to seeing some more from you.......

return the favor and peep Street Prophecies
thanks
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Old 05-29-03, 02:53 PM   #5
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very good storytelling, rhyme was well thought out and put together nicely!
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Old 05-29-03, 03:08 PM   #6
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this was pretty good, it had a nice storytellin feel to it. stay spittin yo,1
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Old 05-29-03, 04:54 PM   #7
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yo thanks for the posts...keep postin please
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Old 05-29-03, 05:03 PM   #8
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nice song flowed very smooth, hope your homies liked it holla La Familia
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Old 05-29-03, 05:04 PM   #9
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tight drop i like how u stayed on topic
keep it up
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Old 05-29-03, 05:04 PM   #10
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story line was nice... originality was aight, been done but i like anyways... wordplay, yea, it was cool... tha rest of it... so/so... keep building.... you'll be dope
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Old 05-29-03, 05:39 PM   #11
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DAMn FAm...................nice drop even though u aint that active in our crew forum..lol maybe drop yo pic or somethin...and be apart of crew battles...lol

Anyhow nice drop
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Old 05-29-03, 07:07 PM   #12
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aite i have been in the forums some bitching goin on ..needs sorted
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Old 05-29-03, 07:10 PM   #13
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........this was a nice drop.......i told u u'd get better....and u are....keep it up............yo return tha fava and check out my drop BRE Presentz : My War Stories and tell me what u think..........on tha thread..........
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Old 05-29-03, 07:20 PM   #14
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haha nice job, didn't kno u was dropping open mics.....anyway good job i was feeling it
keep at it
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Old 05-29-03, 07:22 PM   #15
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pretty tight... one way you can make it better is by turnin it into like a letter to ya homies locked up
that would make it sound more like a story

but hey...dats jus mah opinion
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