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08-25-03, 02:07 AM | #1 | ||||||
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What I'm about..
IP: E660 0577
check this and post some replies y'all, respect and thanks ahead of time...
I'm the source and energy forcing enemies to watch their steps Embodying metaphysical principles and ghetto concepts Skills adept, already wept, sympathy and regret in me ya never find Influenced by my past and drama vast , tainted with a battlin' mind People walk around blind, befalled by blamphamous ignorance I start cleansing all races of frontin disgraces with no traces of evidence Ever since I saw peeps use old supplies, I see right through the disguise Fuck, I'll suck ya pre-written papers and spit the ink in ya eyes Stop the lies, y'all should stop stealing styles like its a biting buffet Shit, I'm half 'black male,' so ya gonna do what I say I spray smacking shit like it's cricket, dumping bodies in thickets 'Ripping' the worthless like they're losing lottery tickets ... Niggas ask who the fuck I am like they have a case of amnesia Inflicting anesthesia, oppenents left as victims of paraplegia Mutin' fallen freestyle falters, printing on papers plastered Shootin' expecting dads at altars, leaving babies as bastards Whether ya black, white or asian, it doesnt make a difference Flaming words and maiming verbs, burning emcees in every instance Making lunches of ya diss, quaking punches never miss, my hits are precise Land mine verses make sure emcee's don't 'step' to me twice My lines refute rappers reflecting regular pop shit in repute Fakes smoking 'trees' giving hoods the 'leave,' forgetting about their 'roots' My times seen too much 'current' talent join the 'mainstream' route I'll never sell out, this 'seed' grows a different kind of sprout Cuz yo, I'm not the type to rap about cars, money and bitches I'm the type to leave ya scarred and bloody with stitches.. |
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08-25-03, 02:11 AM | #2 | ||||
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wow....
vocab was definatly there flow was too there was really good in my opinion keep droppin dawg ya got some talent peace |
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08-26-03, 12:41 AM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: E8D1 5D10
thanks man, uppin' for feedback
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08-26-03, 06:04 AM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 19AF 50C1
INFINITE
THIS WAS A REALLY GOOD PEACE SOME PUNCHES WERE WEAKER THEN EXPECTED BUT YOU FALLOWED THEM WELL I LIKE THIS AND IF YOU LIKE PM ME WE CAN SEE ABOUTE YOU JOINING THE ORDO ABACHO ROSTER |
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08-26-03, 06:08 AM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 3911 5807
That was off the meters, playboy. You raw, I ain't fucking with you..lol. You know who to holla at.
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08-26-03, 07:16 AM | #6 | ||||||
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Rhyming/Flow
Flow Was Dope Dawg, You Had A Silkily Smooth LIke Flow, With Good Internals, With A Good Rhymes Sheme Too...8/10 Vocab/Wordplay Very Complexiated Vocab, Don't See Many "Newbs" With This Sort Of Vocab. You Had Great Phrases In Ever Bar, Bars Like: " Niggas ask who the fuck I am like they have a case of amnesia Inflicting anesthesia, oppenents left as victims of paraplegia"- Were Dope, Also: "Mutin' fallen freestyle falters, printing on papers plastered Shootin' expecting dads at altars, leaving babies as bastards" - Dope........8/10 Concept/Topic You Had A Good IMage IN Your head About What This Should Be About. And I Think You Played This Topic Out Nicely, Spreading It OUt Throughout The 2 verses..8/10 Overall 8/10, Nice "Introductory" Verse, You have A Shit Load Of Potential Dawg, Your gonna Be A Legend At Rb In The Future, Keep Spittin' Word! |
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08-26-03, 07:43 AM | #7 | ||||||
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Niggas ask who the fuck I am like they have a case of amnesia
Inflicting anesthesia, oppenents left as victims of paraplegia Mutin' fallen freestyle falters, printing on papers plastered Shootin' expecting dads at altars, leaving babies as bastards by far the best part of the piece excellent everything gave me goosebumps the talent is there...... My lines refute rappers reflecting regular pop shit in repute Fakes smoking 'trees' giving hoods the 'leave,' forgetting about their 'roots' My times seen too much 'current' talent join the 'mainstream' route i hate to say this for many reasons but this gave me an eerie feeling of tupac................. I'm the source and energy forcing enemies to watch their steps Embodying metaphysical principles and ghetto concepts "how to write an opening bar 101" you are the teacher and i bow to your skill this is an excellent drop i don't think you are a "newbie" and if you are then you are pure talent good luck to you in your future endeavors......................................... ..1 |
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08-26-03, 05:29 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: E660 0577
"i don't think you are a "newbie" and if you are then you are pure talent good luck to you in your future endeavors......................................... .."
ahah.. I guess your right in this.. I've been doing this for about 4 months on another site wit some cats that bring it doper than myself (if ya consider me dope).. we're getter a team together to maybe battle some other sites. Our community is majorly small though.. like 1/8 the size of this or less. But I almost never cypher, I usually battle (ahah.. my cypher's kinda tainted with the battling flavour at parts ) Thanks for the feedback so far guys and keep shit coming.. I'll probably drop some more shit another time, -Ie |
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08-27-03, 01:36 AM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: 305B 92B4
bumpin
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08-27-03, 02:42 PM | #10 | ||||||
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IP: 427F 52BD
uppin for feedback, tell me if ya have anything and I'll hit it up too..
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08-27-03, 02:52 PM | #11 | ||||||
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IP: C1DA C961
dat shit wuz hot............nice vocab and ish.............i wuz really f
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08-27-03, 08:28 PM | #12 | |||||||
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THis was pretty tight, dope on the vocab..that made sence. alot of cats over look that. Nice use of metas too, like the cleverness. You got talent keep up the good writing
Respect your style and opinon so drop by and give feed back on my little 16 bar piece....... http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=75690 Two |
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08-27-03, 10:26 PM | #13 | |||||||
..Soft Focus..
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AMAZING off the heazy lol that was a great spit man everything was there multies medas punches u had it all 1
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08-28-03, 12:17 AM | #14 | ||||||
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thanks a lot guys, I'll be sure to look through your shit too and give feedback on that stuff, and will hit ur shit up fo sho dizzle, but I have to head out now, but I just wanted to say the feedback's much appreciated so far, thanks
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09-01-03, 05:09 PM | #15 | ||||||
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ahah what does off the heavy mean? good feedback hehe
and if y'all give ur feedback, I'll be fair and hit ya back just like dizzle, just post da link |
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