30 minutes to drop

Kay. I'm checkin in. I'll get started if you want. Or do you want to go first? (I was drawing for my signiture, got caught up in it... eh...) Are you going to go, or should I?

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~*This is Sherly Critical, soon you'll be getting your medic bill. Make you out of breath, youll be needing your Benadryl.*~
~*Want to see the way I walk? Do you wanna take the hit-do it all pro? I'm not all talk, I'll be stepping on your toes. There it goes to show.*~
~*Right now you're probably drooling.- Here's some NEW school for the ruling. I'll tell you right now, your momma says she loves you but she's foolin'. She was so disgraced she got drunk, and got with my old w00man. *~
~*You like to be on time, so you can listen to Sister kathy tell you NURSERY rhymes. Game to game, checkers, to the dice, how much you make in this bid, it's a NEGATIVE price.*~
~*Don't act like non of this is true, act like I didn't tell ya-you act as if it was all fake- caughing out saliva-like you had pheumonia...*~
~*You don't have to play sick, just to get some white trash nurse on your d*ck, No-no, not at all! They already sympathise that you're missing your other ball.*~
~*Why do you even think you can go near me? It's your funeral we're going to burry. While others throw flowers, it will be grenades that your hoes will carry. Whethor your pasty body will SPLATTER, to them IT'S FUN...- "IT DON'T EVEN MATTER!"*~
~*I'm not exactly the worse hater, and I will not gloat. Yeah hunny, it's OKAY if you swing both Ways, with your.. nanny goat. I have nothing against that, but it's not for me, when you do the farmer nasty.*~
~*How high was your education? Did you even pay attention...? Or did you only stare at Mr. Perkins, just for your own ejaculation.*~
~*Being as you are, you might try to act all Martial Artist, but you you squeal like a girl, when you think of Arnold's prostate. Should I go there or not, we don't even want to know, whethor or not, if you gone through school as your daddy's hoe.*~
~*As a finisher, I put this as a punisher, Don't ever dress up again like Jennifer. Don't piss me off when I'm working on my signiture.*~

(Jennifer Lopez, for those whom don't know.)
*Innocent look.*~

Sorry, went over board, but umm... anyways.. I thought I only had ten lines. ~*Shrugs a bit.*~ No hard feelings though.

critical droppin like diarrhoea in the toilet - sloppy and you spoil it//
Ya paper aint thick enough for ya shit - you can’t foil it//
What U still here? - should be takin notes to improve ya gear//
If I was you I’d change my name – start from afresh ,all cookies cleared//
I’ve read better food labels - than your weak child like fables//
I’ll email you some – give you ideas from the nutrition tables//
Saying your rhyme over in my head - see images of baboons instead//
Only animal not dead - dumb enough - to put together wot u said//
Next time try harder - prove ya aint weak like white Viborg lager//
It’s a light weight like you, and I prefer something darker//

nd. eva can you drop aan honest vote here thanx
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...21&pagenumber=2

punches:N
flow:Both
Nice Structure: S
Metas: N
Personals: non and S's were just fake
Vote: N

Pretty close, next time S dont write a novel i almost didnt read it

Anyway PLEASE hit my battle up against Deadly Game wit an honest one, thanks ide appreciate it! Its at the top a frontlines

Uppin, as usual, I don't care much. As I said, I did not know how many lines I was making. What I wrote, looked 10 lines only. And I've had my fun of listening to a guy talk barely English, cutting every sentence, only using two words, and saying his kind's the one that created English. Or for those whom aren't from around where I am. Ingles... or what ever. I don't speak names, as of respect, so if you do know him, give him a nice pat on the back, and a thumbs up for his English. Peace- I'm out to pick up my girl.

come on some one vote its draggin on...........
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n got dis

overall better verse

opponent needs to elevate learn how it's done

vote=N.D. Eva

Honestly vote here
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...0727#post830727

thanx, ill check yours when i can........peace

and ill give an honest vote incase anyone sees this and thinx theres any thing dodgy is goin on...aight.......HOLLA...LOL

uppin for votes..................

dont want to sleep on it for a week................

.....peace!!

flow sherly
wordplay ndeva
structure ndeva
personals none
vocab ndeva

overall ndeva wins with a better verse in most categories