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07-10-04, 04:10 PM | #1 | ||||||
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*Smile*
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*Smile (The Eyes Of A Young African Teenager)* (Inspired by everyone having rough times......) (title Inspired by a lot of people....) everyday I have a excruciating struggle in life and at school~ I live in a all-white community and discriminating me is the rule~ so once I wake up I put on my eye-liner and my favourite lipstick~ I try to put a *smile* on my face and think of the true politics~ Mr. Mandela, Ms. Parks both overcame the hate in they lives~ pain, anger and other things pile up in my brain's archives~ *school bus comes* I get on and people stare ... Am I different?~ it's like they never saw a African before...Was I born a accident?~ I arrived at school and made my way to physical education~ last pick on a team...no one likes me thats a big complication~ I get shoved to the floor and they calling me a porch monkey~ then call me a illiterate and I say "fuck it" cuz I'm not a monkey~ after that class time went by so quickly then school finally ends~ after this day resided I lost all my remaining goddamn confidence~ that very night I cried myself to sleep in the fuckin' darkness~ in my dreams my mental suffering fades away in evanesce~ while still in my dream I see my ancestors farming on their land~ but than a KKK member came struck them no time to understand~ right before my relative died I swear he looked straight at my face~ and mouthed the words "fight for your rights don't be a disgrace"~ a split second later I woke up.....and inside I contained a lions pride~ and I shouted " respect my entire race let that be known worldwide~ ^^^wow I put emotion in there so I need no hate............................ and to all the white people on this site don't take this offensive......... I wasn't saying that all white people are like that I know there are nice people of that race & I respect that and if you do take that offensively Im sorry for the misunderstanding....................... and people note I'm not African/Jamaican........... and also this was made because I wanted to do a topical on this and I wrote this right now since no one will accept my bitchslapped threads at all............................................... ............... (NOTE: This was originally posted in Open Mic but it only got 2 replies so I am trying my chances on poetic stuff.........) (ALSO I AM NOT A GIRL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!) !~rate it~! __/10
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07-10-04, 04:31 PM | #2 | |||||||
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nice nice
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07-11-04, 11:01 PM | #3 | ||||||
Umm...Yeah
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IP: 5043 32F4
uppin.....need more feedback people...........................
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07-11-04, 11:24 PM | #4 | ||||||
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good shit man i liked it
forsaken comen str8 outta canada lol jp good shit |
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07-11-04, 11:34 PM | #5 | ||||||
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no thank you's????
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07-11-04, 11:35 PM | #6 | ||||||
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fine be that way haha jp yo forsaken u in tha tag tourny??
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07-11-04, 11:51 PM | #7 | ||||||
Umm...Yeah
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IP: 5043 32F4
^^^THANK YOU HOMEY!!!!! and no I'm not in the tag tourney but im in the punchline league!!!!!!!!! and Canada rules!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! reppin' my country to the fullest peeps!~
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07-12-04, 02:56 AM | #8 | ||||||
Light Weight
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IP: DB8D 5EE9
damn...most def feelin dis...hott...and deep a hell of alot of emotion in dis...keep it comin...peace
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07-12-04, 03:20 AM | #9 | |||||||
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this is hot and true shows a lot of emotions i give it a hundred percent
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07-12-04, 07:44 PM | #10 | ||||||
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^^^thanks to you both...if ya like it so much nominate me!!!!!!!!!!!!
for best poet of july!!!!!!!!!!!!! http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=133865
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07-12-04, 09:18 PM | #11 | |||||
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i like it, forsaken, u get props cuz i ain't a poet fa shit but when u speak ya heart it comes out as poetry..
i was feelin' that seriously.. forsaken, ~wun~
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07-12-04, 10:56 PM | #12 | ||||||
Umm...Yeah
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^^^ I was typing from the heart fasho I respect everybody
who don't talk shit for no apparent reason!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Thanks for the feedback!
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07-13-04, 08:39 PM | #13 | ||||||
Umm...Yeah
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uppin 4 some feedback people!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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07-14-04, 10:37 PM | #14 | |||||
G.T.I.G.
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das deep i liked it cuz u put a hell of alot of emotion into this piece tite 1
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07-16-04, 02:02 AM | #15 | |||||||
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that i an amazing poem i really enjoyed reading it keep up the good work boi
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