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"No Need To Brag" post feedback
IP: 5043 32F4
I don’t gotta brag to you that im one of the best/
I kno my punches make you snitch cuz im one that’s possessed/. With lots of magic and p.s.a features/ Think im good well how about these weird lookin creatures/. They spit like me with a smooth touch of potential/ I kno im last to spit but maybe im to essential/. For this site maybe, but realy no need to say that/ Cuz Im always versing somebody that’s good in a hard combat/. Its realy hard to take the win and get 5 votes/ Try to write 39 lines its hard to hit the harder notes/. Now this is my very first song that I have ever released/ I hope my style dosent die down and become deceased/. If that happened I would get mad and stunt out herbs/ Well realy I don’t think that would happen cuz I got pretty good verbs/. In my songs there well done with better vocab/ Then most people becuz im always studying like im up in my own lab/. I never stop to let a faggot win against-me/ Drop that faggot herb real quick and believe that dre sensed-me/. He found me freestylin on the radio just like emeinem/ And if I see my gurl and her freinds ill be sure to spend lots of money on them/. |
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
uppin
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Blow Me
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IP: 7D7A FF3D
Strechted Lines
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My Lines Are ILL yo |
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
not realy the fit the rhythem in my song i went with im so fly i went with but uppin for feedback
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
yo uppin
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New to RB
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IP: D60A 453D
yea,.,, it ok... some lines were streched.. but still fit on beat i s'pose... lol... some lines didn't even rhyme together, like you jus slapped random thoughts together... such as "Try to write 39 lines its hard to hit the harder notes/.
Now this is my very first song that I have ever released/ I hope my style dosent die down and become deceased/. If that happened I would get mad and stunt out herbs/" like the release, deceased lines fine, and herbs goes wit the line after, but they don't connect in any way ... work on that shit,.,, 1... where in canada u from?, i'm in Tdot
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
^you need to elavate if you dont get that then buddy thats how we write on the net lol learn learn learn is what you need
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GoD LiKe
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IP: 947A 2011
This Was Ok
Nothing That I Havnt Seen Or Herd B4 Peep Out My Peice Below Thats Creativity For Ya Ass Over All This Peice Was Ok 6-10
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
thanks man and i believe that it was good cuz yer a rank vet and has rank songs better the mine by alot but.
ya uppin |
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Flyweight
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IP: 0FDB 39D6
its was ok
could have been better, sense, you know, you supposively beat me in a battle... ryme sceme was okay, dont know what homie was talking about-but- you're still garbage... reading text from you are like a replay-seen it b4
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
man you talk lots of shit for someone i worked in a battle i was sayin shit about how i spit rhymes n shit and magic n stuff you should understand it or i will work you again
uppin |
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Better than you..
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IP: B587 18C9
yea mate i thought it was good. i like ur wordplay and ye u got alright verbs too.
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Spit it from the heart, spit a thousand darts, split ya head apart…
Emcees depart, like rubin carter my hurricane left u scarred… Like a spiked bat grammatical bar, like a wonderland drug… Tumble - ing like a flagon of rum and 2 blunts, like the funk baby… |
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
^thanks man uppin
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New to RV
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IP: 28AD 5545
Yea It Was Aight I Think It Could Have Been Alot Hotter If U May Of Taken Your Time I Dont Kno If U Did Or Not And Then Again I Dont Kno Your Skills Since Im New To This Site But.
Overall I Give This 6.5/10
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Standin' on the corner straight slangin' rocks Aw shit! Here comes the muthafuckin' cops! So I dash, I ducks, and I hides behind a tree Makin' sure the muthafuckas don't see me Now my fat sack of rocks hell yeah i stuffed 'em Police on my draws, i had to pause And yeah, it's still muthafuck 'em Now my game is tight, tight as fuck is my game" |
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
thanks naw i didnt realy take my time but give me credit im 14
but anyway uppin |
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