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10-06-05, 04:41 PM | #1 | ||||
Ike
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FEATURED TRACK: Ike - Obvious Subliminals.....(LMAO)...
IP: 9A36 31F6
left feed on Tha Q and Kons tracks
yea....the intro...basically theres this girl that cheated on my boy...and i wanted to diss her...her names amanda appleton....so that explains the 2 A's line.... most of this is a regular song...until the last part.......... www.soundclick.com/youngike enjoy.........
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10-06-05, 05:00 PM | #2 | ||||
The Rulers Back
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LMFAO at tha blazin caucasin...shits hot son flow is on delivery nice chorus dope..lyrics good concept is flames overall am feelin it prolly fav track of yours...=1=
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10-06-05, 05:10 PM | #3 | |||
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IP: 2029 97B3
ayo it aint workin on right now so ima leave some feedback later.
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10-06-05, 05:12 PM | #4 | |||||||
Ya mom massages my nuts
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ok typing as I listen.......def liking the rhyme scheme u opened wit....u coming wit way more multies..u usally be on sum 1 syllable shit....lyrically is was ah'ight.....the "poking at the fat gurl theme" topic...is actually a heavily...overdone way of tyring to be comical in a track.......I got exactly what u was saying but I didn't really find it funny....hook was koo....wasn't spectacular but it followed the melody of the beat pretty good.....the flow of ya verses was the higlight of the track....I was impressed with ya flow......beat choice was smart.....but I aint really find it funny.....rosey odonnell jokes?...come on son....potbelly jokes?..come on son.....its overall creativity was subpar IMO cuz I am comparing it to shit u have done in the past...this is below ya usual level of creativity but above your usual style of rapping.....so u took 2 steps forward an 1 back....gotta keep the forward momentum playa....but aside from things I disliked....solid drop...stay up ...........1
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10-06-05, 05:28 PM | #5 | |||
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ok lets see what you got
intro is playing. blazin caucasian? ha ha okay. HEY whats that i hear about chinese? beat is cool. definitely feelin the beat. simple but cool. but kinda repetetive so it gets boring. lyrics - ha ha. glasses and pimple faced white boy. lol. at least you being honest. yuck. rosie? thats sick. chorus - i dont like it. well actually its kinda cool. well not cool but it was reasonable. 2nd verse - cool with the 2 different voices for the conversation. ha ha. 2 A's. LoL. you crazy with this second verse. flow - i wished you woulda went fast to switch it up like that fireman song but it was okay. it let me focus more on the lyrics since the flow was slow and simple. your voice kinda sounded like Em at some points. that was weird. but overall some funny stuff. about the girl hangin over the seat. thats pretty nasty. leave feed on the new track in my sig |
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10-06-05, 06:35 PM | #6 | ||||
Ike
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IP: 577C 1E7C
thanks a lot guys......
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10-06-05, 07:30 PM | #7 | |||||||
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yea like this diss...
lyrics were good funny at some points beat is pretty coo flow was good liked the delivery.... chorus was aiight tho |
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10-06-05, 07:54 PM | #8 | |||||||
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intro is sooo lame no offence, but the cheers are obviously looped and poor quality.
thank god thats done, beats nice... flow is good slips one or twice, delivery is cool... lyrics are ok, couple lines made me giggle abit.... dont like the hook. not bad RTF: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=210712 |
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10-06-05, 10:06 PM | #9 | |||||
The Paragraph President
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IP: 2372 BC06
LMFAO! @ the intro...your rhyme scheme was fuckin good, flow was fuckin crazy. LOL @ usin this 50 beat or w/e it is cuz I only heard this and sensers remix. But your creativty was mad up, your lyrics was killa on this, the best I've heard you do. Also a overall funny track you kept ya lyrics funny talkin bout pimples n what not haha, and pretty much sayin you a nerd hahaha, you dissed yourself lmao. But I like that haha. overall dope track, Ima prob listen to this for a long time.
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10-06-05, 11:53 PM | #10 | ||||
Ike
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IP: 577C 1E7C
word thanks......
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10-07-05, 03:51 PM | #11 | ||||
Ike
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IP: 577C 1E7C
uppin.................................
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10-07-05, 04:15 PM | #12 | |||||
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The intro - damn son, lol, you need a burger. 98lb weakling status, lol. Intro worked well.
the beat I like. The first verse, the flow it good enough for the most part. Real honest and for the most part pseudo-humerous. LOL @ at the fat chick. The first verse is dope son. Apparantly you're coming at some one who played you, but this shit's pretty funny all around. The Two A's line is hillarious. Second half before the second hook was too open and wasn't doing anything. The song serves it's purpose, I woulda looped the hook one more time after it on the last bit to make it sound a lil more complete, but it's pretty much a done deal. All in all a good song that needs some polish to make it more listenable, but it's still good at what it's meant for - shittin on people. 1
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10-07-05, 07:40 PM | #13 | ||||
Ike
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IP: 577C 1E7C
lol thanks................
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10-07-05, 10:58 PM | #14 | |||||
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I like the intro...
LOL @ how it starts off like a story... "obese fat piece of meat* ROFL! I like the first verse best, flow-wise and lyrically. I love this beat... the hook is tight for a diss, aight second verse, you said stuff that we wouldn't know unless we knew the chick/asian.. but overall the jokes were kinda funny and the.... haha @ 2A line haaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa lmfao! you bogus haha. Your flow is getting better every track, keep it consistent and yo' I'm feelin the multis, you def improving... keep up the work.
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10-08-05, 03:01 AM | #15 | ||||
Ike
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IP: 577C 1E7C
^ why thank you....lol
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