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03-08-03, 01:45 PM
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"Isaiah"
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This is some next level shit...may need to be read twice...lol
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ [Verse One] "Thank you for your participation, and the lacerations... And your remarkable training as an Iraqi special agent... You are amongst the greatest, nerves of steel, tons of patience... You realized its death before dishonor...Young Isaiah... Because of the work completed, you must now conceive this... To keep our business secret, your whole life has been deleted... Working with you's a privilege, you truly am a genius... You remind me of a younger me, the way you planned and schemed it... The way we ran the scene was priceless, a 'Kodak Moment'... You would hold back no shit, ready at a "GO" snap's notice... And I appreciate the help, Isaiah, you bombed 'em, thanks... You're set in your ways, Truly Yours, Suddam Huesane..." [Verse Two] "Dear Suddam, you're welcome for the A-Bomb... Don't think of it as anything less than a payed job... I received the 10 million in cash, thanks for the praise... I made no mistakes, simply cause I'm made to be paid... See I ain't, what you think I am, be I stray?... But I'm not a killer, I'm really a spy for the C.I.A.... Isaiah Williams is my name, not Isaiah Demetri... I blew up the building, wasn't gonna, I say I'm in knee deep... Probly gonna get fired, but oh well, it's a small price... I served my country well, but yours too, a wall's rise... Has me blocked from the right way, I keep fallin in pits... Death's breathing on my neck, It keeps callin from it's... Depths, anyway, that was a wonderful connection... But look, you asked for a friend, and got a cumbersome rejection... So my advise, is to never trust anyone, I played ya... The C.I.A. just, got you good, Sincerely, Isaiah........" [Verse Three] "Sir, we intercepted these letters, it looks serious... Somebody on our staff is dealing with terrorists..." The president looked puzzled as he un-wrapped the notes... He read 'em both aloud, he begun to gasp and choke... He too couldn't believe that Isaiah would do this... He thought his eyes deceived him, he screamed and he threw fits… He took a second to himself to recollect his thoughts… He stepped to the window, took a deep breath then talked… “Why would this be a topic to discuss? Its Earth’s fear… How could any man do such a thing? It churns near… Discourages America, kills it and turns shear… Love into hate, created a monumental urn there… Took innocent lives, bomb smoke fills the burnt air… Horrid visions in my mind of the death that lurks there… This is the type of cowardly act that can jerk tears... But to my knowledge there's no Isaiah Williams that works here......." ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Feedback please.... P.e.a.c.e. |
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03-08-03, 02:03 PM
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IP:
 siiiiiick as hell.Ur like tha best story-tella on dis site no doubt.if ne1 could give a reader visuals thru text,its u.U posted alot and none of em r garbage,they jus keep gettin hotta.Take a lesson kids.Stay ^ -Avi |
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03-08-03, 02:10 PM
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Ya Mama's Favorite
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Next level shit for real dong, this one of the best I done seen in a mintute. Top not imagry with words. Tight shit, dog
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03-08-03, 06:09 PM
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.BeTteR ThAn YoO!.
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Man, that shit is fucken clever as hell, as av1 said, your one hell of a mutha fucken story tella dogg, keep that shit up!
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03-08-03, 07:19 PM
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IP:
thats the most creative stuff on this thing.. flow was good, i read ur early days stuff and that was good too, but ur improvin even more as the days come through..
peace out... |
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03-09-03, 11:22 AM
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IP:
Thank you all for the replies...i appreciate the love....
P.e.a.c.e. |
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03-09-03, 08:05 PM
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IP:
Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
P.e.a.c.e. |
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03-09-03, 08:37 PM
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IP:
where the hell do you come up with this shit
the imagery written is based on first person type shit like you where actaully there nice shit mad props im interested in readin more of your stories |
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03-09-03, 09:26 PM
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IP:
Thank you....if you wanna check more of my shit out...the links are in my sig...appreciate the love Rb...
P.e.a.c.e. |
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03-09-03, 10:29 PM
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damm!!!!!!!!!!!
This shit was too creative dawg Yo I don't know how to put this in words right now... ... the vocab was crazy, rhymes where nice, straight flow... but the concept of this is what blew me away... storytelling on it's way to perfection... no exaggerating either... and you make each verse decent in length and to the point... I haven't read much from u... but I got to say this is the best so far... -1- |
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03-10-03, 02:22 PM
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IP:
thats what writin is all bout right there,telilng a story and givin imagery and makin it like u right there being all descripitive, im feelin ya vibe fa real dun,keep ur ideas nice.1
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03-10-03, 03:31 PM
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IP:
Damn! I feel like a fuckin genius right now....lol. Thank you to all who recognize my skill, and acknowldge it for what it is....I appreciate alot.....
Thank.... P.e.a.c.e. |
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03-12-03, 03:47 PM
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Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
P.e.a.c.e. |
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03-12-03, 05:11 PM
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i could beat this kid in storytellin.......i'm just not on this site
iLL multi's and a good story, you stayed on topic flow was great too |
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03-13-03, 04:59 AM
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.BeTteR ThAn YoO!.
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Yo peepers, you think you got killer skillz to match Apostle in story tellin, then spill yo shit man, don't just run yo mouth, prove yoself dogg!!
Peace Out!!!! |
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