It's an anniversary of sorts - With songs which can dump the pictures
Of terror. . But Patriotism's gone; along with it's bumper stickers
Artificialiality is an understatement, the spiel needs no introduction
Security's our achilles. . Unfortunately, our heel feeds sinful functions
This is Regionalism! United no longer, our role won't stop the signs
"What liberal media?" says Ari Fleischer as they Bowl for Columbine
We abuse "Nine Eleven" daily - converse in incessant sets of four
From the second CNN reported it, it was a destined metaphor
Nobody notices. . Masses talk and try to spike rarer systems
Uneducated defines it. . Every answer ends, "Uhhh, kinda' like terrorism. ."
This argument's neither pretty nor exciting. . Hell, it'll sedate concerts
But the fact is, the news miseducated us. . & the media is state-sponsored
Not the "Who and Why?" questions - I mean the aftermath's commencement
From September 12th to present day, the average path's horrendous
Tongue-lashings are numerous. . I'm sorry, but young Erica deserved it
She just made an earth-shattering revelation, "America's not Perfect?!"
Diffuse the worms, we're lucky to be on top as the noose confirms
& think about what "Nine Eleven" means before you abuse the term
Education diffuses my opinion - psalms will concede they're shook
My qualms will be oppressed. .


















As soon as America reads a book!

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Dope, And I Like The Mockery At The End..
Good Shit Man, Respectable..
And Dope As Always..

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=79237

^Hit It

Good work G.Hod/Beginning LoL

You took a somewhat controversial stand with this piece, one in which I respect and more then understand. When talking about the day Nine Inch Nails Drove Nine Inch Nails Into The Fingers Of Eleven Others controversy is sure to arise, as it should.

"She just made an earth-shattering revelation, "America's not Perfect?!"" - A very good, true line. If you make any statement like that you'll be frowned upon, and for the most part because its true.


Good Work Man.

Yeah, you ripped it here and with good flow and above average vocab, so props there. The end really made this piece great and was a good summary and closer. Really damn good piece man.
Keep droppin, I'll keep an eye open.

Hit this up if you get the chance...: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=77400

the flow was average but the concept and da vocab on dis was nice as fuck

loved it

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Thanks for the feedback, Bruk & Co. .

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Give me more feedback, please!

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that was a good drop, i liked the vocab the best...the content was ill...really feelin that drop keep droppin man an if yah can peep my "different teritorial flow" thansk peace

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

damn this shit was dope..........nice vocab....tight tight flow......
i liked the wordplay, and it was a peice that meant somethin.......
respectable drop....worth applause......metas were nice.....but ya flow was off da hook

hit this up
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=79405

damn dude i was definitely feelin that, from the topic, to the vocab, to the wordplay i thought it was good shit all around. keep postin i really enjoyed readin that.

back to the first page, at least.

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Heh. .
Not a bad piece, flow was basically on-point throughout, could possibly of used more multi's / internals to make it more solid, but to be honest - i felt this without them. I Liked the 'achillies hell' line, and also the "america's not perfect?!" line, they were easily the standouts to this piece, finish was rounded off on a humourous note, i think ive seen the topic attempted before but you did easily better than the last piece i read on this topic, all in all not a bad piece, i apologise for the short reply, but i believe the newer members deserve the longer feedback, just take pride in the fact i felt this. .

Eace-Pay!

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Dope open mic, the whole thing had my eyes glued to the computer screen...

This is a line I thought was really clever:

Thanks. I haven't seen an Open Mic in a few days, Cam. . Would you be interested in a collaboration of sorts?

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That sums it up really well^^yup

I was feeling the flow blah blah blah

Sorry about the length of this reply but im in awe and i can't give you any advice or critisism to whats already been said

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