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Old 10-11-03, 01:39 AM   #1
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Tales Of Conclusion - Collab (KnightShade and 13th Disiple

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Chorus
Sanity.. But what does it all mean..
The difference between reality and the way things only seem..
Mentallity.. Merely and illusion..
But I'm slowly going crazy, here's the tales of my conclusion..


[13th's verse]
The cells of my cerebrum slowly subsided down to par
diagnosed wit Schitzophrenia wehn realizin reality dwelled afar
a battle of war raged on inside of my phyical & spiritual members
confusion of dreams & ginuine things cause problems 2 remember
was December a holiday?,a celebration for the messiah bein born
Jesus is the way,the truth,the life..then why do i steadily mourn
my rain steadily pourin..an illusion or time to think outside the box
christians/jehovah witnessin missions said my mind is unorthodox
its a paradox,a parody,a joke of my future, present and past...
in the beginnin its the end,my last chance had no chance 2 last..
see life thru a glass,predict every step and go thru the mechanics
if theres a God,why are Israelites and Jews convertin to Satanics
can't stand it...who am i...yup...its the tales of my conclusions...
accept the twist of fate & just dwell in the illusions of my solution



Chorus
Sanity.. But what does it all mean..
The difference between reality and the way things only seem..
Mentallity.. Merely and illusion..
But I'm slowly going crazy, here's the tales of my conclusion..


[Knight's Verse]
Undeniably, My vision faces the stars, skimming the sky.
Intaking every moment to heart, this sight swims in my eyes.
Basking in the everlasting moonlight I stare upon the clouds.
And my tranquility interrupted by a voice which draws me down.
Blinking hesitantly I stare at the source of my vision's demise.
A relative intruder deflects my dream away to schism my eyes.
Breaking, falling into this void of unnecessary accomplishments.
I stare at the unorderly being, trapped in hell until my mom's convinced.
To leave me alone, just give me some time for myself for once.
The constant harrassment, pacing through wastelands to water fronts.
Back and forth, heaven to hell, a pulsating rhythm within my mind.
And once my mother leaves again my heaven glistens and shines.
This rhythm defines disorder, bitching and Complains.
I'm missing half of sane, clutching, twitching through the pain.
Hitching on this train, Taking me away from sanity.
And this life God handed me was less than what was planned to be.
Does this define humanity? God forbid me to last one day.
In the household throwing fists or in the streets with gun play.
But after years of this, something's missing, seems confusing to find.
Abusing all kinds, Choosing my signs, I'm slowly losing my mind...

Chorus
Sanity.. But what does it all mean..
The difference between reality and the way things only seem..
Mentallity.. Merely and illusion..
But I'm slowly going crazy, here's the tales of my conclusion..
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Old 10-11-03, 01:47 AM   #2
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i liked this drop it was hot. i was feelin just about everything nice wordplay, flow, structure,and vocab.

my favorite line
see life thru a glass,predict every step and go thru the mechanics
if theres a God,why are Israelites and Jews convertin to Satanics

nice flow 9/10
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Old 10-11-03, 01:48 AM   #3
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BOTH RAPPERS CAME IN AND WERE POETIC DESCRIPTIVE AND COLORFUL WITH RHYMES......
knight you gave me my start with a collab if i remember right......so i had to critique this harsh and fairly.

this peace was off the rock....
the hook alone sets up expectations of detailed rhymes and harsh concepts where neither of you failed to do anything less then captivate the reader.
another factor was taking words whos' spelling doesnt rhyme but portraying them in a manner that does.

i give this a ten and hope you post more often.
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Old 10-11-03, 01:59 AM   #4
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thanks, and we will were dope like that
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Old 10-11-03, 02:00 AM   #5
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YO PLEASE PEE MY 9 TO 5 PEACE I THINK YOU'D LIKE
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Old 10-11-03, 02:13 AM   #6
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Props to my 2 fav boiz!

13th you have good vocabulary and everything, and I'm learning how to do better with structure and stuff from you.


was December a holiday?,a celebration for the messiah bein born
Jesus is the way,the truth,the life..then why do i steadily mourn
my rain steadily pourin..an illusion or time to think outside the box
christians/jehovah witnessin missions said my mind is unorthodox
^ I like it that you take religious facts and use em in rhymes, we both religious and thats koo!

~Props BoO~


KinghtShade

you had the longer verse, and it was interesting to read

Fav lines
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To leave me alone, just give me some time for myself for once.
The constant harrassment, pacing through wastelands to water fronts.^^^^^ I FEEL YOU!
Back and forth, heaven to hell, a pulsating rhythm within my mind.
And once my mother leaves again my heaven glistens and shines.
This rhythm defines disorder, bitching and Complains.


Good Job!


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Old 10-11-03, 02:28 AM   #7
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thanks for the feedback everyone much <3
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Old 10-11-03, 04:40 AM   #8
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Old 10-11-03, 07:07 AM   #9
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damn fellas u really brought a masterpiece here.
the vocab was perfect. imagry was flawless.
the flow also perfect theres really nothing i can
say wrong about these two verses...props to both.

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Old 10-11-03, 10:51 AM   #10
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thanks for your feedback RB Ledgend material only the open mic folk can say?
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Old 10-11-03, 12:28 PM   #11
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Definitely Garbage.

















































But nonetheless...it's one of my brother's scheme of insanity...and yet a very much hype built verse from shade...

How can these two people double team on this?
...because they are on crack...and nobody can stop them.

On the other hand...I liked how the chorus started the whole thing then jumped on to 13th's verse. How he managed to set the concept through which he succeeded to begin it with an executable approach. In his verse subsided a strong questions of life that would made us think of how it is like being unable to answer all that easily. Religions slipped inside of it a bit. Fractures thats making us realize how life's full of crap and yet a stupid explanation is still at the back of our minds. The battle concept from physical to spiritual kinda gave a hint of feelings figthing in such indepth.


"its a paradox,a parody,a joke of my future, present and past...
in the beginnin its the end,my last chance had no chance 2 last.."

^Terminology used over all is well damn good *slap*...13th's idea of doing his part concluded gayness...errr..i mean toughness of its verse. Brilliant.


..and yet shade had a different view...He tried looking it through a transparent mirror..having to see the minds of others through his. Making decisions between whats' right from wrong and whats real from not. Confusions with Conclusions. Very well compiled in such a way that the whole idea of the concpet reflected through it. IN a way...it was greatly done.



Damn hoes making me jealous with these stylist poetic approach work...


here's for you 13th and Shade...







































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Old 10-11-03, 12:38 PM   #12
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My sister shiznit....what can i saY.....besides..........















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Old 10-11-03, 01:55 PM   #13
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yeh like thanks for the feedback *grabs her ass* word life!!
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Old 10-11-03, 02:01 PM   #14
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yeah nice drop that was all ill the wordplay was sweet and the vocab was ill and i just all around a real nice flow i enjoyed readin and look forward to more in the future
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Old 10-11-03, 02:07 PM   #15
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that was fuckin blazin, there wasnt an aspect of that shit that could use help, the imagery was great, the vocab and wordplay were amazin, i thought both verses were off the hook, the topic an content were hella original, yo this should be put to legends cause that was awesome

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