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A minute...processed into time lost in a greater time
Where..., the time is adding to losing your life's time
And your life, each second is gradually losing power
And your time increases in killing you, minute to hour
The time you've wasted, without even using your mind
And your time can't be returned, we cannot ever rewind
The time I'm losing right now, looking for words to rhyme
Describe my life? Half, must probably be a waste of time
A quarter trying to find something else to do with my time
And the Last quarter doing something, but still losing time
It's a losing battle, between your life and your precious time
Breathing each second and doing nothing, losing your time
But hell, You seem to think you have so much time left
A conquest, to search for further mysteries, though yet
Your taking longer than you thought, maybe, even then
Have that much time left, who knows when it might end
Who knows if you'll recieve something drastic to finally die
Who knows if you'll live to see tomorrow,losing your night
Livin it up? Some say thats a waste of time, but it's your life
Death or not, some have to realize...
Time will always win...it keeps moving, while you live
And after you Die...

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hey bitch, were supposed to be cheech and chong, fuckerpoo,lol jk nice drop, good vocab, metas, blah blah, you know nothing much for me to penalize, just, did u name it "Time" because you used the word 15 times on 22 lines?? lol really though it was a good drop

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Retarded people's heads are to big..I'll be back with something just as funny as watching the Special Olympics..don't worry..

^yeah...thats the whole concept...Chongitty Chong. Even duos need solo projects.

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Real Nice Drop Skiddz. Feelin The Content. . Liked How Since The Title Was Time, That The Word Was Used Quite Often. Like Relik Said, Nothing Really To Penalize. . But Is There Every Anything I Need To Penalize In Any Of Your Pieces? Everything I've Read From You Has Been On-Point. Flow, Mutlis, Vocab, Everything In This Piece Was Good. Keep Um Comin.

-Formula.

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it was a alright piece should fix on your structure and evelvate more on your vocab and wordplay

uppin for my man skiddz

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Retarded people's heads are to big..I'll be back with something just as funny as watching the Special Olympics..don't worry..

^good looking,lol.
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Time to read this piece, and get good feedback this time.

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that was ill, for sure, great concept, had meaning, i definately was feelin it, you did use time quite a bit, the word started ringing in my head... time... time.... still doin it lol

Fuck Sleepers....

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it was straight, flow was ight...
keep spittin

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^care to respond, and stop gettin cheap posts to post half assed open mics and waste valueble time.

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Just some opinions, peep. Try not to start the verse off with rhyming with the same word, The first bar is the jump-off. Rest was good

skidds...this was nice...more of a poem but nice none the less
topic was creative and had a twist
vocab fit well within context
very superflous
nice man this shit was really deep i liked it

peace