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10-26-04, 07:53 PM
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T.empting N.atural T.alent (T.N.T.) {Hot}
IP: 183F 8D72
people been requestin' that i do a solo open mic since peepin' some of my other works.. so due to that request, here goes.. ENJOY..
T.empting N.atural T.alent [TNT] [chorus] my wit's infinite, this femcee survived the fittest words hard-hittin', like windshields n pigeon shittin' sympathy's forbidden, shutdown extra room 4 critics ya loss sealed in manilla like results from your clinic verse balancin', cuz you spare prewrits like rations go rushin' like Stalin just to tempt my natural talent [verse 1] like freestyles in short-hand, your visions lopsided got heavy-weights hiding, false numbers confided rockin' stilletos, knockin' knees back like flamingos look to Ouiji cuz your W doesn't lie in palms of Cleo metas taken dimensions outta ya strict x- n y-axis ya record low rated like porn films payin' an actress hard to elevate when ya verse's never brought up fuck with Fiya to get grace marks leakin' stigmata [chorus] my wit's infinite, this femcee survived the fittest words hard-hittin', like windshields n pigeon shittin' sympathy's forbidden, shutdown extra room 4 critics ya loss sealed in manilla like results from your clinic verse balancin', cuz you spare prewrits like rations go rushin' like Stalin just to tempt my natural talent [verse 2] like the divorced n prenupts, I'm pushin' minds broke you overflowin' to dodge reprecussive breast strokes cast de-voting cuz ya critiques are viewed with laughs ya rib cage collapsed, pass plates 'til ya vocab run laps valves malfunction, ya pass bladder stones in ya kidneys underestimated but I give verbal comas like shock therapy war fought barely, scales at fault cuz ya votes carry costs rep overreact, after the fact I smoke ya damn near exhaust [chorus] my wit's infinite, this femcee survived the fittest words hard-hittin', like windshields n pigeon shittin' sympathy's forbidden, shutdown extra room 4 critics ya loss sealed in manilla like results from your clinic verse balancin', cuz you spare prewrits like rations go rushin' like Stalin just to tempt my natural talent [bridge] stay challenging my logic like vaseline plus fluids ya verse hot, my name + gaseline set off next to it ya ruined egos in vain, ya vein catchin' blood clots loose digits go to letters cuz ya losses playin' slots [chorus] my wit's infinite, this femcee survived the fittest words hard-hittin', like windshields n pigeon shittin' sympathy's forbidden, shutdown extra room 4 critics ya loss sealed in manilla like results from your clinic verse balancin', cuz you spare prewrits like rations go rushin' like Stalin just to tempt my natural talent aight leave feedback, pz.. i'm out..
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10-26-04, 08:49 PM
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IP: 9702 17FA
Damn... You ripped the shit in the verses... Loved that Cleo Line... Chorus was kinda off, but chorus's are the hardest thing in my opinion... Also, make your verses longer, your verse and your chorus are almost the same length... I'd give it a 6.5 outta ten with the chorus, and an 8/10 without it... Good shit.. Work on hooks...
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10-26-04, 08:56 PM
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IP: 183F 8D72
that's why i need to put this shit to audio, cuz i can make those exact words sound too sick... thanx for the opinion... uppin'............ like whoa.............
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10-26-04, 08:57 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP: 28AD 5545
This was dope fiya, yea, i think the chorus was a little off too, but everything else made up for it,it flowed very well, and your lyrical content was hot, a self glorification type piece i guess, this would sound dope in audio....8.5/10
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10-26-04, 09:01 PM
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«αи αятιѕт σf ωσя∂ѕ»
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IP: 8F88 348A
yea, can't wait till you do audio.
 This peice was hot. Loved the flow. Hot shit. Nice imagery. Damn, sick. The chorus was pretty ice too. Damn, feelin' this shit,g url. I give it 9/10 Your next om should be one about me. lol j/p You don't need to do it if you don't want.  
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«αи αятιѕт σf ωσя∂ѕ»...  ..."тнє ℓєgα¢у"
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10-26-04, 09:01 PM
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IP: 183F 8D72
wanna do a remix, SPuL...?
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10-26-04, 09:04 PM
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«αи αятιѕт σf ωσя∂ѕ»
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IP: 8F88 348A
nah, I don't like this topical stuff. But we can do some other type of song.
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«αи αятιѕт σf ωσя∂ѕ»... ..."тнє ℓєgα¢у"
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10-26-04, 09:08 PM
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IP: 183F 8D72
alright.. i'll consider that..
pm me with a topic.. aight, ~uno~
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10-26-04, 09:10 PM
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«αи αятιѕт σf ωσя∂ѕ»
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IP: 8F88 348A
i don't kno, you can choose. Like braggin' type, love, hater diss, blah blah blah.
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«αи αятιѕт σf ωσя∂ѕ»... ..."тнє ℓєgα¢у"
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10-26-04, 09:16 PM
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IP: 183F 8D72
i ain't into love songs and shit, too many people do them, i'll pick a topic sumtime and have it due next week.. (the next time i get near a comp.) lol..
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10-26-04, 09:17 PM
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IP: 183F 8D72
i'm talkin' to you about this and i forgot to up this again, here it goes...
uppin'...................
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10-26-04, 09:20 PM
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Back....
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IP: 5BC4 01EE
Loving your verses gurl ignore any other niggaz that hate. Because this piece was very very dope.
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10-26-04, 09:22 PM
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IP: 183F 8D72
thanx, pushin' my weight around here..
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10-26-04, 09:32 PM
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IP: 9702 17FA
I might drop an audio tonight or tomorrow...
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10-26-04, 09:33 PM
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IP: 183F 8D72
^word, do ur thang kuniva...
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