Okay I've done alot of work in here before.....
Now It Has Been Accepted as poetry....but really as never been too poetic....Deep nontheless but not poetic.......
This Right here in my opinion is my BEST POETRY here to date...da message i'm tryna send is much deeper than words...it's da thought i'm tryna get inside your mind......
And I jus hope...that when your done...you've takin a message from it....It's not one side to it......
As long as you get some sorta message from it....then that's all dat matter's...........

So here it is.......
My best Poetry Ever
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Why is da worst perception of life seen thru windows..??
why is that...i dream nightmares..and never wake up on a pillow..??
Still tho....I'm like a flower wit it's petal's fallin down.....
once at top of it's game....it's overweighed by it's crown..//
why is da best felt emotion felt thru a frown..??
and yet silence still as it's own sound...//
We fight for good...but bad wayz we go about it....
Conflicts disease...our self esteem...and stuck here shoutin...//
it's like for da first time standin at da bottom lookin up at da mountain..//
lookin in da stars..and wishin you could count them..
without em...we prolly be confused...walk da wrong direction...which path to choose..??//
we lose time to heaven in it's prime....
meanin to dis is..life's takin once it reach it's shine..//
kinda like mine...but i live to tell...
so i wonder am i da man we know in hell...//
caused bright stars to rise and then fell..
and it don't sit well...now tears turn farther...
drop to da floor..another drop,,,it just makes thingz harder..//
Kinda Like "Our Father" Who's Art is In heaven....
little love here...pain over here...and that's wut i'm gettin...//
my final question...is can we forget a killer..??
i preach da truth of life, death, I am Da Poetic Sinna......//

I Hope You Have Enjoyed..........
If You Read Then I'd Greatly Appreciate Your Thought's,Belief's,And Opinions On this........
Thank You.....

Peace

dat was REAL deep and i was really feelin it. my fave lines:

caused bright stars to rise and then fell..
and it don't sit well...now tears turn farther...
drop to da floor..another drop,,,it just makes thingz harder..//
Kinda Like "Our Father" Who's Art is In heaven....


like i said i was really feelin it. i really like yo style. keep it up. one

...great depth to it...emotions were pure and strong...some home truths were 'spoken' most def...executed very well....imagery was superb ish all the way through....


"Why is da worst perception of life seen thru windows..??
why is that...i dream nightmares..and never wake up on a pillow..??
Still tho....I'm like a flower wit it's petal's fallin down.....
once at top of it's game....it's overweighed by it's crown..//
why is da best felt emotion felt thru a frown..??
and yet silence still as it's own sound...//"

^^^^i was most definetly feeling this part, some real home truths in this one...especially the part about dreaming nightmare, but never waking up on a pillow....but really i felt it all hard and deep anyway....


"We fight for good...but bad wayz we go about it....
Conflicts disease...our self esteem...and stuck here shoutin...//
it's like for da first time standin at da bottom lookin up at da mountain..//
lookin in da stars..and wishin you could count them..
without em...we prolly be confused...walk da wrong direction...which path to choose..??//"

^^^this part was very well put too..it hit a few home truths for sure....


we lose time to heaven in it's prime....
meanin to dis is..life's takin once it reach it's shine..//
kinda like mine...but i live to tell...
so i wonder am i da man we know in hell...//
caused bright stars to rise and then fell..
and it don't sit well...now tears turn farther...
drop to da floor..another drop,,,it just makes thingz harder..//
Kinda Like "Our Father" Who's Art is In heaven....
little love here...pain over here...and that's wut i'm gettin...//
my final question...is can we forget a killer..??
i preach da truth of life, death, I am Da Poetic Sinna......//


^^^^ was a great round off to a superbly put piece...once again many home truths in this one....especially the part about life's takin once it reach its's shine, kind like min, but i live to tell....




mucho respect for this blud...stay strong....and keep on exorcising your 'ghosts' within....but fight with restraint and thoughtful control when confronted with obstacles in 'reality'....inner control is the key....respect....

than 4 peepin varentao.......
it's greatly appreciated.......
I always love ur replies.....
cuz some way or another i feel like i've leared sumthin..
much respect dogg.......

uppin...

uppin....

Sin, if this ya best poetry ever.
then son, you gotta lotta growin up to do an emotions to go through....

and it don't sit well...now tears turn farther...
drop to da floor..another drop,,,it just makes thingz harder..//
Kinda Like "Our Father" Who's Art is In heaven....
little love here...pain over here...and that's wut i'm gettin...//
my final question...is can we forget a killer..??
i preach da truth of life, death, I am Da Poetic Sinna......//----- asasin


liked the linez above as i did the hole thing, shows emotion, far to an extent. maybe will see more of this type of poetry from you/...??????

pz, nyce piece

WHAT'S DAT SUPPOSED TO MEAN..??

Let's see wut you can drop....broke....

thanx 4 peepin Poetic Blais and everyone else........

Holla Broke.....

uppin...

This is a very tight piece~ fav lines ^^^^^^~

keep doin ur thang

dis was a deep piece-content much felt-i guess we all got sum similar soul cries--------i look forward to peepin more of ya pieces-----------one love always-

this was...i...well...hmm...(*ponders the best way to say this*)...it was on a level that i rarely see in poetry. you examined the situations and played into it excelently. the use of imagery was great....uhhh...(*looks at the clock*...*thinks to herself "no wonder i cant think...i should still be sleeping....*)

keep it up boo...love ya!!!!!

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Yo dat snippet..^^ turned out dope......

If ne one is wonderin why unfuckwithable dropped lyrics in here...it's cuz.....we wrote it for a track...
I jus got back from recordin it.....And he ain't got a printer...
so we posted it here..(To save freepostin elswhere)...and then i copied it here to my wordpad...printed and went and recored it........

If ya wonderin wut da finished product is....peep Rhyme Reaver Arena in like 1 day......

ne wayz uppin....