Window Sill Dreamin.....

One Eye shut...My lazy eye was trippin.....
Thought go kill dis lil man....now crazy guy is missin..//
sittin at my window...husstlers in da crib...
Situation is...I'm a 6 year old kid...dad jus came home from a bid...//
dis is how i live...sometimes i see them make their lil trade...
dope for money ...dat's how popz's get paid...//
I have no time to misbehave...cuz dad ain't pay attention...
I pick up for mom...that's without a question...//
sometimes i jus listen...look up to da ceilin...
get out dis fuckin hood...dad could stop dealin..//
now i'm jus dreamin...then i look out my window....
people shootin gunz round kidz..dis is how we live tho..//
Sometimes u gotta get low...or get hit...
people jus don't give a shit...watch ya back don't trip..//
this ain't livin good...it's jus how thingz be livin in da hood..
i could give in...and i should...nah betta watch my mouth..//
dat ain't da type of thinkin...if i'm gonna make it out...
i hate my house...1 bedroom apartment...//
2 siblings 2 parents...dis is my lil hardship...
dis ain't da hardest...I jus dream thru da glass...//
one day i'm a make it...one day jus get up off my ass..
can't go to class...for a crook..it's too much work...//
readin no book..is gonna feed my fuckin thirst...
but that's jus a minute of how i have to live....//
so i'd rather spend my time imagining...My mindz glad to give..happy thingz..thoughtz of a way...//
da type where i get money...but most of all get away
even tho i'm here today...tomorrow is much different...//
tomorrow's another day i'm a jus wait to get to live it..
but thru my window...even tho its in da ghetto...//
you see thugz n metal..i see a lil meadow...
now don't let it get you....//
I jus look out da window hope and pray....
Jus dream that everythingz gon be okay.....//

hope ya enjoyed it.....

wUn

this was alright and it had alright imagery
and I hope shit gets better for you regarding
your future..decent write

this was not bad, i think u drifted a bit towards the end but keep at it..

can't go to class...for a crook..it's too much work...//
readin no book..is gonna feed my fuckin thirst...

was really feeling those lines respect

this was intense boo...the imagery was pretty good...it flowed well and was easy to follow...was this about your childhood? i couldnt imagine livin like that...

It's a lil overexaggerated...but not dat much......

my dad came home from jail...and startes husstlin again....
but he quit...and fixed himself up.....
I'm stayn outta shit......Everything good...Except i still live in da same crib.......

Can't wait till I move.............Someday.....Soon....Hopefully...

ne wayz thanx 4 replyin everyone...........

uppin......

NICE PIECE

NICE VOCAB

AND THA WHOLE NINE

FEELIN IT

KEEP IT UP

Yeah Thanx 4 peepin^^^

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Very nice
good imagery
feelin it though

Dang Boo,
shit was off the hook ...
Excellent flow ...
Much props,
Head up ...
Ur dream will come true boo,
all the hope in da world fo` u!

Pz xXx DiMe
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thanx 4 peepin dime..

uppin..

yo i was likin tis piece i kno how it is livin like tat and shit but keep it up aight

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