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Old 05-28-05, 03:38 PM   #1
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Just a little something for this bitch thats duckin me Feed is appreciated and always returned..1 www.soundclick.com/fluidmoon Top track!!
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Old 05-28-05, 08:34 PM   #2
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this was aight...expected alot better from the "Only Female On Rv With Audio Rec Wins"...i must say that your better at rapping then u are singing...i think everyone would agree with that...i think the intro was the best part...u sound to much like a barbie in the intro though...shit was aight...take this how u want but it's feed

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she sounds retarded who the fuck is that? and why do the previous posts say she sound good. ok anyways, the chorus is horrible at least hit one note correct. and fade this girl's singing or something it's annoying. this is not cd material. get a better singer first. no hate but Yahweh! shit's horrible what the fuck is the taste on this site. 2/10

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Old 05-28-05, 10:22 PM   #3
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Listening-........Intro, alright that was funny..............The beat was cool, The punches were coo, not like i thought....you could've hit harder, but blah. The flow was WTF!>?.....was you reading?. The punches at the end, was ok.

Meh ok diss...............1
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Old 05-28-05, 11:25 PM   #4
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meh

intro..was ok...

flow is what stands out..it could prolly be way betta...what u should do is just read ya lyrics til u memorize them..then that will help wit ya flow and delivery..ckuz i can tell ya readin..oo yea..that reverb is to heavy too...lyrically...it was ok..coulda been way betta lyrically..the personals u have u gotta make them relate to somethin else for them to really hit hard..like make them a punchline...not just sayin what she does....

for a diss track..i dont see this as makin her feel bad...or even wantin to come back at u...if u wooulda made the personals hit harder, then maybe..
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Old 05-28-05, 11:35 PM   #5
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so it's okay for everyone else to give the SAME kinda feedback that Fiya did but because thhis is Seven's little bitch and Fiya is the one the diss is about it's not okay for her to speak honestly?...hmmmm, that makes soooo much sense...

anyway...yeah the intro was kinda funny...werd, it does sound like you're reading, and this beat's too slow and "cutesy" for it to be a battle or diss...and why you put that line about you AND YA MAN "merking" her out like you can't do shit on ya own...but yeah, your bars were aiight, at least you used some vocab, but they didn't hit hard cuz your flow was off and the beat wasn't right for this type of track...should've left this as a text diss or something, it would've been better that way...

keep at it though I suppose

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Old 05-29-05, 02:39 AM   #6
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its ok....ur flows decent....beats cool....overall....the diss is good...lyrics were cool...

Production:8/10
Flow:6/10
Lyrics:8/10
Voice:7/10

Overall-7/10

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Old 05-29-05, 02:47 PM   #7
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yea, thanks for the feed, i did this shit quick to drop something, the beat was tooooo sllooooww i thought too..i wanted to emphasize on all the personals though. appreciate you letting me know what i need to work on kiddos, without beefin in here,considering most of you in here beefin with me anyway and L.veracity, i did this shit on my own,so that comment is irrelevant.1
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Old 05-29-05, 03:24 PM   #8
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y u delete my posts it was feed..?

like i said feed = delivery was horrible, you sound like you were reading from paper.. flow has been elevated but you still sound like you talking instead of actually "flowing". I felt you didn't come original lyrically so it's good you didn't use this as a battle track, you woulda got disqualified for using that same line you used against I daughter Hoz.. and your personals were statements kinda the way you stated them in Lyricist Lounge, nothing ground breaking that's why it wasn't effective.. You said all those things before in Beef Threads now you just putting sound to it. Most importantly, ADD PUNCHES to your disses, that's what creates a diss punches and not statements. And try to refrain from using the same lines others may have used (pictures and threads and lip lines). They reminded me of Seven's diss, therefore it's not creative and NOT effective. Try not to say the same shit everyone else says. And get outta that monotone voice, you come off as boring. But nice attempt glad you tried. No hate my opinion.

THIS IS FEED and Tips for elevation, so if you erase it AGAIN Seven so help you Gawd. It's fucking Feed, damn read before you go deleting shit just cuz it got my name on it.

your questioning me is out of your power, dick head.. fall back, son of a bitch.
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Old 05-29-05, 03:35 PM   #9
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lol, at ur little intro... hahah ha, ur rap style is just like 73rd's... openin line was coo. u better at rappin than singing, some parts are boring tho... flow gets off at some parts... some good personals in here, kinda short but all in all this was aight... better than i thought it would b
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Old 05-29-05, 03:59 PM   #10
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eeeeewww the beat is wack......

nice lyrics... the intro was cool..

decent drop....
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Old 05-29-05, 04:44 PM   #11
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intro was the only nice thing i guess cuz u were talking instead of rappng..but then again the whole track just sounds like your talking instead of rapping no emotion...beat was trash..ehm...yea..coulda came harder for someone who's "Pissing on flames'....u didnt really piss on flames with this here..you kinda let the flame ignite to something even larger.....anywho.......bottom line. .is ..this is trash..and i wouldnt put it past seven if he deleted it..but if thats the case he should delete every post in here because none of it is saying what you would rather them say..xcept for Seven's post..
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Old 05-30-05, 05:09 AM   #12
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Listening: Flow real slow sound plain it does sound like ya readin it's got minimal emotion disses themself are good some hard punches some aight personals intro LOL sounded like my one (bad boy killa diss) but yea it was funny overall good track better emotion in it woulda made this stronger...keep droppin ~1~
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Old 05-31-05, 07:15 AM   #13
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beat is nice, but not the battle type

Flow is on point, personals are good, some nice wordplay here,
delivery is ok, your the only girl I heard use multies this good since Nigue

good diss
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Old 05-31-05, 09:14 AM   #14
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word im feelin the beat...but not really battle orientated

your flow is what needs the most wok, your quality is decent, lyrically dis diss was filled wid loads of personals that cud have been changed a lil bit 2 make em more hard hittin and funny if u feel me...overall this was a fairly decent diss...u should battle L.Veracity...that wud b a dope ass battle....Peace
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Old 05-31-05, 09:24 AM   #15
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i don't know what anybody in here mean saying your flow was good.. it was not. your delivery is terrible but then again i can't see you trying to get gully on a soft beat with that voice you have. you clearly had personals that 'could have' been effective BUT you just made statements.

this = Not a battle verse if you can't throw at least one punch.

you should have left it in writing. if Lady comes back to this, which she has no reason to (that's how weak this was).. she'd probably rape you lyrically.
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