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05-01-04, 02:18 PM | #16 | |||
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Listen to this guy , he knnows what he talking about.
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05-01-04, 02:18 PM | #17 | ||||
O.wning Y.ou D.aily
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IF you guys seriously want some help......come to this cat. He knows what he is talkin about, and quite frankly, I wish more people would battle like him......
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05-01-04, 02:23 PM | #18 | |||
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IP: 6DCA 81D9
Exactly
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05-01-04, 02:26 PM | #19 | ||||
Still Sick
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Here's a grammar tip
when you type try to spell the words how they are REALLY spelled dont make lines so fuckin long and try to minimize the use of guns in your verse gun punchlines are played out!
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05-01-04, 02:28 PM | #20 | |||||
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IP: 75F5 BDD1
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=121094
^^ vote. Not a freepost, because I do want honest feedback.
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05-01-04, 02:28 PM | #21 | |||||
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IP: EC0B 84C7
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05-01-04, 02:29 PM | #22 | |||
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IP: 6DCA 81D9
Paste verses here... I"m not going to follow links
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05-01-04, 02:31 PM | #23 | ||||
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IP: EC0B 84C7
i'm not that good but self gloifying is just garbage.
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05-01-04, 02:38 PM | #24 | ||||
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IP: EC0B 84C7
check this verse
Me vs. Jpoll league (I lost) You are now listening to the the best... break ya spinal column,'un-even contestants' and 'lines' like a 'seismograph',watch 'backs fold' Your style-is-dead, rehearsed-n-old, J couldn't win this battle if he "drove my Royce backwards" to "REVERSE-THE-ROLLS"! fool,grippin tools,i spit scriptures the only time u "DROPPIN SCIENCE" cuz u found "CHEMSITRY WAS TOO DIFFICULT" battling with week ryhmes is un-negotiable, so make the transaction to audio, cuz failure is the result clap these bastards,put em in the back of the truck now their nothin but "JUNK-IN-DA-TRUNK" like " the ass of J-LO!" turn ya fitteds to a halos,in a way we're similar cuz ur style is "O.K." and mine is to "K.O."! if you ever herd Phat's multimedia would make you have seizures n choke get the pope,i have a "sense of humor" ...im battlin this "clown" to prove "i can take jokes!" got u "scared of me sun"(son) like "albinos in the summer" i'll wreck u again after this and give u so manylosses ur record looks like a SERIAL NUMBER! (time to murda) change my alias to "sickle cell" the way i make "kids get reduced" u get no pussy,if a girls moaning "OOOOO...J!" she prolly just has a "fetish for citrus juice"! Bold words are forced words Last edited by Phat Mic : 05-01-04 at 02:45 PM. |
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05-01-04, 02:40 PM | #25 | |||||
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IP: 75F5 BDD1
^^ were you the one talking to other people about making lines shorter?
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05-01-04, 02:43 PM | #26 | ||||
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i know this verse is hella streched but i didn't want to drop the content. If i would have no one would got the verse
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05-01-04, 02:45 PM | #27 | |||
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IP: 6DCA 81D9
If its stretched nobody could give a fuck about the content...
You need to work on having a decently flowing, shorter verse. First do that... then work on wording in the content you wanted
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05-01-04, 02:48 PM | #28 | ||||||
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Alright.. my verse.. I realize the open is weak... never done 32 lines before:
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05-01-04, 03:01 PM | #29 | |||
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This junior high crew, still doing lunch recess n nap time
… no wonder their hardest punch is just a flipped Dr. Seuss rhyme not much of a punch... but decent structure.... Call this the next school slaying, but hey at least y’all got your fame Kinda sad… These kids, still playing superhero, but they got some goofy ass names not good... poorly worded with no real punch LI, call yourself The Elevator…. “that’s the only place they hear my song” Call Kuniva the Battery Man, the way he say “it’s Li Ion (/I on)” sloppily worded... not a bad concept if used properly Check their biography title - Kuniva and Li: A Fairy Tale… of sorts And now we on the topic… I’m about to make a long story short not bad Yo Kuniva… This cat cop my punches and think he got a “freestyle” Worst sig ever dog… even your crew don’t think your worthwhile not good... shouldnt have used it No wonder, when you got half the posts in the complaints forum I’m blacklisted already, next someone get a restraining order for him… not much a punch... I"m sure blacklisted punches are played... or should be Who we kidding… this cat queerer than a bill worth five dollar … and posting his verse in green so he can pretend he a man of color bad..... Come with Cochran and still can’t connive a (kuniva) win … not when your album worth less than the wrapping it arriving in poorly worded... but not bad... the set up was better than the punch however You drop shit? Take laxatives till you sick, and still no bowel movement Come on man… Your father beat you with the ugly stick… and got improvement not bad at all... its bars like this that you show some upside Even worse, check his girl… wait LI hasn’t posted any pics Man… these cats worse than a game of hoops at the special Olympics played... not good Try as they fucking will, they just can’t get their balls to drop Defeat me? Better luck getting Niagara falls to stop… again... not good.. not even a good concept Cats such lightweights, picking up the mic leave their wrist bone cracked Got throwback album… hand it out to fam and it gets thrown back poorly worded.... played concept... just not good Just got shown whack, won’t show they faces till eyebrows grown back They skills a known lack, just can’t come hard… like they got a torn sack too focused on trying to use multis... just not good Bars so lightweight they curling them to elevate… and still failing Wait.. let me get this straight, how you hard if my mic check got you wailing? mic check punches need to be used better than this...... Sometimes it just hard to tell… which is the bride n which the groom? These cats are way ahead of their time… cuz they can’t help but come too soon not good... at all And ayo… Excuse me, ladies and gentlemen, its time to publicly announce LI, your ass is worth dick… because its what’s on the inside that counts not bad.. played though..... Basically.... definately work on your wording... it needs alot of help. You also need to focus on keeping the level of punches... you fall off far too often
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05-01-04, 03:12 PM | #30 | |||||
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IP: 75F5 BDD1
^^ aight, good looking
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