can we get some more feed por favor?

I'm SSSIIIIIICCCCCCCKKKKKKKKKKKKKKK of beats with sped-up voices as hooks and choruses. Who ever EQ'd the live singing fumbled it since it's too dry. You can't leave a singers vocals dry like that. He's got talent, but it's just mishandled by who ever did the levels in this. Some light reverb and just enough echo that it's barely noticible, then turn the leves down about 1-2dB as a starting point and it'll seem more harmonic right off the bat. It's a little to abrupt and corse as it is now, with a pretty smooth voice hidden within. Also, as the singer, whne you sing in and out of lines, instead of saying a word like "I" at the start of your line, sing it like "hI" with some "h" on the breath so it transitions in and out smoother. Makes your voice sound more whispy and easier to zone out to which = good for your music.

In any case, the beat's cool, but the flow in the first verse is lumpy. Like some words are cut up, like instead of saying "maybe you're the one" for example would sound like "mibee yuhduwun" just so the line fits.

the second verse is bad. Texty to death, and listen to the last line that says " I cherish your every single hug". Thats' the same thing that happened in the first verse at points and as an ender, that's the WORSE time to put it. It coulda been much more on flow if it was edited to "I cherish every single hug" and cut the excess words out.

Third verse is the best one on the song, too bad it's the shortest. You hoes shoulda put Ike on this. this is like..his home base, tacks liek these, ya know?
The feel and aim of this song kinda reminded me of a PG-13 rendition of Perfect Groupie


oh, PS Status, don't do that again with the feedback unless you're gonna use all them links for one track. You rob yourself. Think about it and you'll see why.

Oh yeah, ALL THREE of you guys RTF here:http://community.rapverse.com/showt...772#post2475772

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thank you for your feedback Doomsday. or Apexx. will return the feed.

returned the favor but I think you jus gave us sum shit about the beat when I couldnt care the less...

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You might wanna re-read it. I spent spent one line out of 4 paragraphs talking about the beat it self. smh..

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You actually spent one paragraph on the topic which was the same size as the next 3 paragraphs........

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Nah son. These are the only two lines out of the entire feedbakc that I even mention the beat:
I'm SSSIIIIIICCCCCCCKKKKKKKKKKKKKKK of beats with sped-up voices as hooks and choruses.
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In any case, the beat's cool, but the flow in the first verse is lumpy. <--and this one talks abotu the flow, not the beat really.

The paragraph you think is about the beat is about who ever EQ'd the song, and tips for the singer. If that's not feedback, I got no clue what is. With that said, I'm not gonna debate about my feedback when everyone else got it. 1

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yeah thanks for the feed. no more arguing. that was actually good feedback compared to other peoples one line feedback.

Listening...

I don't like the beat...

First Verse- Flow was choppy at the start...vocals are really loud over the beat...quality is good...delivery was coo...straight verse...

Hook- Wow...you can most definetly sing...some nice R and B shit...word...

Second Verse- Flow is choppy...quality is decent, nothin special...lyrics were coo...delivery was lacking...marriage proposal..? Haha...nice...decent, just work on ya flow..

Gawd damn that hook...

Third Verse- More singing...dope...rap comes in...nice flow...good quality...but damn...your singin is dope...go do some American Idol shit and win.

Overall...decent track...Implicit stole the show though...

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thanks for the feed LE.

^^like how i made you the number one man on this track, lol the "chorus is dope"
thats what there saying....lol

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Yeah def thanks for the feed...implicit did shine this track

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^yeah thanks to everyone who showed support in leaving feed on this track. appreciate it.

everyone wants to sing nowadays


haaaaa


WTF...the track dropped out in the left in when the lyrics came in

haaa...weird


quaility sounds good


1st cat wasn't bad...flow is pretty decent


rhyming could be better...sounds personal though...or close to it



Intermental...sounds like you rapped some truth in that

"gimme some brain...last name"...not sure if someone u wanted to have ur last name u'd brag about getting brain from


verse sounds deep though


last cat...voice sounds EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEK

flow is pretty coo


not bad dawgs


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