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12-12-05, 04:51 PM | #16 | |||||||
Is F'in Bored
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12-12-05, 06:28 PM | #17 | ||||
GG Haterz
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Blackmage and Diligence:
I had to re read this verse in certain spots to completely understand the story, partly because the details were unclear, and others I had to pay attention. So good and bad. One thing I noticed was some forced rhymes with words that didn't quite fit that well. Try re wording or adding some bars so that it all flows well. Story was pretty cool. Flow was fine. Overall nothing outstanding, but a solid piece. Fathom This and Devin: This piece was well written. Vocab was a bit complicated for the verse, but it worked out. Story was ok, not quite as captivating as D and B's. I liked the flow of this verse a lot more, the collab and everything else. The simplicity was a nice change, but it was still complex in some ways. I like your piece better, mostly because of the story keeping my interested. v- Fathom and Devin
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12-12-05, 07:28 PM | #18 | |||||
All these Dead Presidents
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Thanks for the honest feed. Lets get atleast 2 more in here!!
1-0 in our favor...
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12-13-05, 01:45 PM | #19 | |||||
A Life Of Chryme
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Fathom This & Devin Beat Diligence & Blackmage.
Closed Moved.
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