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01-22-04, 08:21 PM
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IP: CD76 910C
i truely dont know how i could throw in more multis There was one in Nearly every Line..eh..anyway Uppin This y'all
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01-22-04, 09:07 PM
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IP: 5C4B 9DFC
The story was well done, and your structure was good... you had consistent multi's, which is also good... flowed well, and kept a consistent rhyme scheme... the only thing you had problems with was vocab, didnt really push any boundries... and some grammatical problems, but i guess those were just typos.... 8/10
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01-22-04, 09:19 PM
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IP: 6A02 D0E5
hey man i liked this...... it had a lot of shit that people could relate to.... overall a nice peice, good flow.... out of all the things that people post about feelings i think this is one of the best ones i've seen... ur vocab was on target nice job send me some more of ya posts if ya want i'd like to check them out...
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01-23-04, 01:37 AM
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IP: CE1D FA05
Thanks Y'all^^
Uppn This... |
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01-25-04, 02:18 AM
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IP: DD10 0DFF
man i read this before and i already left feedback but i just had to read it again because i liked it
 ...good drop here man....i expect to see more from you!...i liked the emotion....and i like reading about love cause i write a lot of stuff about that...but yeah man keep writing |
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01-26-04, 09:41 PM
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IP: 4C6C 9700
^^ LoL Thanks again Masta ya really didnt need to post twice...Uppn This looking for some more replies....
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01-26-04, 11:37 PM
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IP: E38C 4580
Ok Piece Uski. . I've Seen Alot Better. . Like Edicius Said, Imagery Was Forced. . So Reality Didn't Come Through With This Piece. . Flow Was On-Point Tho. .Vocab Was Pretty Good. . Multi's Were Nice. . Emotion Was Ok At Best. . Could've Put More Into It. . Hook Was Nice And Catchy. . Could Definately Make It In THe Commercial World. . Overall, Average Piece From You. Pz.
- Check Out My Drop . . Doper Than Thou. . . Good Look -
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