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06-04-05, 05:10 PM | #16 | |||
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I Really Enjoyed Your Content...
Very Nice Emotion And Imagry... The Structure Was Easy To Fallow And Such... Only Thing About This Piece Was It Was More Like Poetry... Because It Really Didnt Have A Rap Flow... It Was More Like One Sylable Rhymes And Such... So Ya, Just Working On Your Rhyme Schemes... Stay Up And Keep Writing Kid... You Look Like A Very Promising Writer... .One. |
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06-04-05, 05:59 PM | #17 | |||
Poet's Daughter.
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IP: A54F 64DD
^^ Thanx,.........Uppin for more feedbacks...............
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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06-04-05, 11:10 PM | #18 | |||
Poet's Daughter.
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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06-05-05, 06:44 PM | #19 | ||||
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IP: D92C 0475
This entire piece was dope. I was feeling just about everything in there...you had some good emotion, nice structure, and a good amount of vocabulary in there too. But, some of ya shit seemed like it was forced in certain areas of the verse, just about everything else was tight though man. I was mainly feeling this bar the most..
He walks in, the silent makes him curious, but still he's a lunatic Heavily breathing from his lungs to the nostrils. ooo he's so caustic This had good imagery and I was feeling the emotion..dope shit right here. Good overall piece Tweetlet.
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06-06-05, 07:25 AM | #20 | |||
Poet's Daughter.
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IP: 568C C721
^^ Thanx for the feedback bruh.........................Uppin.
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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06-07-05, 12:50 AM | #21 | ||||
Witness, 4 God, 4-Ever
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IP: 12E8 B4A0
I liked this piece, there was good imagery and structure, and as was stated it seemed a lil forced, but not too bad......imagery was the best though, really made you feel you were there, keep it up
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06-07-05, 02:24 PM | #22 | |||
Poet's Daughter.
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IP: 6F1B DF6B
Uppin to it's fucing Roof...............................
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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06-08-05, 06:03 PM | #23 | |||
Poet's Daughter.
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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07-05-05, 12:55 PM | #24 | |||||||
the medicine man
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IP: 888C 2BD4
really creative piece right here
i can see why u one of the best topical writers |
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