D you dont edit it with the links now you post 2 links to battles you voted on now in your nextweeks battle

on to the voting

Stanza- Your verse was decent but you cut it to short IMO. Like mabye if you had done like 6 or 8 more lines it would have appealed to me better but it just seemes like you cut it to short... your emotion was alright but it could have been better and your vocab was decent. Not to bad of a verse but i just didnt feel it that much

Dervla-Your verse was good. Nice twist to it and your vocabulary was great. you didnt seem to be throwing big words in there to meet a quota or anything like that it was just perfect with the amount of vocab you used. your emotin i felt was your strong point in here and very well done aswell.. you kept it nice and vivid and the imagery was great also.

So yeah

Vote: Dervla

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stanz,u dropped 2 simple here man.nothing stood out 2 me
it seemed like u was tryin 2 write a poem..its a topical
i dont kno where you were goin with this..but it wasent towards a win

derv,u had crazy wordplay .nice structure u stayed on topic
a couple things stuck out 2 me..unlike your opponent
i got u takein this fairly easy for an overall much harder drop
seemed like u attempted to atleast put some time and effort
into this

stanz dont get me wrong u didnt have a horrible drop
it jus showed that u jus keystyled and didnt take your time
a good winning topical takes time

v/derv

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