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5 | 83.33% |
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08-12-04, 08:50 PM
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you gotta hear me again
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IP: 9EF2 7F0D
uppin my lose lol nah but don't sleep on dis
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08-16-04, 05:35 AM
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...Belong...
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IP: CCAE A7E8
Voted For: VIRTUE
VIRTUE got this...i think this was a hard topic to go on as it's quite personal i know for a fact i wouldn't be able to spit on a topic like this coz it aint happened to me so props to both for that... A.K.A nice verse but the struct was off a lil sum lines long then went short but flowed well...i thought it was a bit plain tho could've been better due to the fact i have seen better from ya... V nice verse had sum real emotion in it...i like the switch in years and the wordplay used...nice structure and flow maintained in the verse...all in all...u won this easy.
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08-16-04, 08:26 AM
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...tha princess of rv...
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IP: 6AD2 8F43
Voted For: VIRTUE
virtue.... Ur rhymes were kinda predictable.u need more complex vocab...the content and imagery was good,but i feel u need more depth to your writing.it was quite simplistic with the imagery really.rather than jumping from one part of ur verse to another(like from crashing on the dash..to goin to hospital)..u shud try write in depth(like surroundings,noises,feelingseycetc,,,) overall it was decentish. 6/10...... A.K.A....structure was poor,which made the flow choppy(and lose the "\\"it doesnt do anythin 4 ur piece.)u had the same problems as virtue in your vocab,imagery,depth....apart from yours was worse...u jumpin from one line to another with no depth...overall i didnt really like ur piece because it lacked everythin really.ok content but it needs to be a lot deeper overall 4/10....looks like a freestyle verse. vote-virtue...although urs wasnt great,it was all round beta than a.k.a. both need to up vocab,multies to improve flow,depth and imagery. return tha fav.
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