This was good but it was hard to read. I think you should seperate your bars for your piece so it can make more sense, and so readers don't et lost in the rap. Ohter than that it was good.

I was feelin some of the punchlines you came wit
keep your sit clever and it'll be all good
checkout some of my shit too..1

- Da LyRicAL ViLLiaN

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okedoke piece...everyone already sumed up how to fix it..from what i'm lookin' at now..pretty good...

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haha poor breakdown compared to my long ass 1 but thanks for peepin

structure was great
flow was on point
vocabulary was nice
wordplay was ok

overall it was an ok drop

thanks....uppin