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01-23-04, 11:22 AM
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Yeh I liked the concept but it got weird once it was about rape and shit.
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01-23-04, 11:30 AM
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I'm an alias...
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*stamps legendary on this thread*
and I go to nominate this... I think... I'm lazy though I'll do it later...
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01-25-04, 01:30 PM
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New to RB
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Another gr8 piece. U jus keepin addin gr8 stuff.
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01-25-04, 05:55 PM
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Yo Pen you always come wit some tight hit an this one i can really relate to dawg......keep yo shit up an hit me up whenever you throw down new shit!
DOPE.......anything else? Feedback Appreciated DAY & NIGHT Pt 2 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109000 |
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01-26-04, 08:44 AM
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See ya.
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This was kind of nice. Normally, a piece of these proportions / boundaries wouldn't please me, you know. But, the dialogue between characters set off a bit of an internal chuckle. It wasn't exactly technically sound, but you made up for it with your storytelling abilities. . Vocabulary could be more complex, which goes the same for the rest of the literary devices. The flow was pretty nice. It was worth reading, & introduced me to somebody I'd never read of. Keep writing, man.
Quality P.S. I'm the owner of a certain topical league that could use some new talent - AIM: RalphsBagels, if you are at all interested.
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