This was very nice... content was good... decent concept (not completely original) but still carried out well.

Good imagery.... good technical piece (ie. good flow etc.)

I'd break down even further but its all been said.

Good drop kiddos

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edicius- this piece was very emotionally driven. I think you worry too much about your lines lining up perfectly, because you use & instead of and....which is awkward looking. I think you misused a few words too("conceal"). is fiduciary a word? Yoru writer's voice was fairly strong, and you had some good vocab. nice work.

penskills-very dope my man. your piece was just as emotionally driven as Ed's, but I think you put more description into the relationship between you and the chick. You combined slang with wicked vocab ("flyest metality") and it made for a cool contrast that makes your style unique. Not bad at all dude.

Nice collab

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damn good om here.....flow was great from both...imagry nice....vocab only outdone by itself.....structures were good......consistant on the topic.....well written...
dope peice fellas liked it alot but wanted to see more........8.5/10

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yes they are all words, lmao.. i never structure.. only now, & its nice to write with the & .. .. i did more the topical aspects,.. he payed more attention to the story.. a lil, .. just to fill me up .. its called collabing .. thnx & upper.

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Oh & look up the words if u dont know them!, than find out what they mean.. than u can say this belongs in legends!.. = ) haha lol

Upper.....

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Again Again and Again,this was a good collabo. Very good vocab and wordplay. I think you too are the best collabo on the list. Both of you had good flow. Keep it up.

This was a pretty decent piece. Ed, your verse was nice. The flow was cool. The emotion was there, and it was a pretty easy read. Nice verse. Pen, you had a good verse too. I like the way you word things. The feeling was there in this verse too. It was an enjoyable read. Nice collabo, fellas.

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Dope piece .. Nice topic flipped dopely .. Both verses went together dopely and made this a good collab .. I read this over twice to find a quotable from each verse cuz I didn't wanna quote entire sections so I came down to one from each that I thought described each of ur verses perfectly ..


Edicius
& pass beyond my own immagination ,what is this relation!
His admiration&the trouble for me sayin no to this temtation

Peniskills
Weak minds using sex to allure, yet I love you for your serenity
Fronting acts of hardcore, Then I always chase for your divinity


Those 2 lines in each verse juss jumped out at me while readin' this piece .. Very nicely done here fellas .. Keep writin' together .. This was a dope piece on both sides and as a whole .. Keep it up .. One

Eddy...
Nice vocab level...flow was good but that short line in 1st part kinda threw me off as did this line

Our paths crossed & i knew this would last forever & ever..
& the conscientious activity's we intented to get endeavour

i never knew Endeavour could be used in that context, unless im thinking of another word.. good drop here i was just confused as to what you were trying to say. You seem to be going in too many directions at once..

Penny..

Yeah I stayed in your reality, didnt go when outside cats hit your ability
You had the flyest mentality, even with your cravings fo profitability

seemed kinda forced to me.. i guess im just an idiot because you also seem to be going in too many directions...while your content is soley based on a girl it still seems to be going too many places. Try and incorportate some better transitions and you should be good to go

check my sig, i do poetry

The best way to write to a topic, is to not write specific to the topic.

Thanks man for the break/feed, appreciated.. =) Mister Poet.

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