^^^aight......thanx for the vote......

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i aint gon go easy on u cause u from phoenix
ill bring my best shit to the table i mean it
opening could have been better. your set went alright but you didnt follow through didnt connect with a punchline/diss
my lyrics hot enough to heat u up in the summer
over 200 degrees while yours are 20 under
Basic metphor i guess... You really didnt come off with that good of a punch
an illegal alien, like ur entire city
ur lyrics suck, so just retire quickly
eh, not really a hard diss, the follow through needed more to it and the set was and alright concept
goin around town like yo what up
no one want to hear ur verse, so shut up
this is prolly your best bar. although you needed more to it, the shot at his name was alright compaired to the rest.
go back and read my verse again, dont miss a thing
no you know how i beat, werent u listening
ending was an alright concept but you needed some rewording i thought

Over all you needed more punchs in you verse. THe ones you had didnt hold much strength, and your metaphors could have been much better as well. The flow of it was alright but you could have streched your bars more making room for a punch or two and still kept the flow with multis.




this bitch thinks he's "sweet" but never "made-love", and how does he think hes comin wit hard "punches" when hes "afraid-to-shove"/
there isnt much need for the quotes.. You didnt really come with any hard metphors to understand and the punchs it slef could have been harder
ur weak, wack punches played-above lies about bein in love, and how the fuck am i supposed to lose to guy whos askin to be "made-fun-of"/
heh, alright personal shot i suppose.. bars were a little streched but kept the flow for the most part. set punchs could have been better

your wack, u got weak punches that have yet-to-connect, just be takin this battle and comin that wack, ur rap career is set-to-wreck/
sloppy bar. needed to be sorted out some and fixed with the flow in certain parts. the punchs werent much really
u bet-im-correct, im never wrong and at 1-7 everyone knows ur horrible, I spit lyrical "cancer" and im always a "threat-to-infect"/
metaphor was alright. but the punchs it self could have been better. not that hard and a little bit of a played area
ur punches r like slime-but-dry, there gross, nasty and bullshit, im killin u, but no one gives a shit, its just a crime-to-a-guy/
concept of the diss was alright. but the follow through needed somthign more. doesnt really connect as a punch
dawg ur rhymes-r-lies, im sick of hearin ur bullshit so ima pop u wit my lyrical nine cause honestly bitch, its ur time-to-die/
eh not a real punch seemed more of filler type ish truthfully. lacked on good metaphors to
u rap like ur quite-high, cause u make no sense, and no one can be that wack, and that’s said as fuck u think it’s a tight-buy/
you lacked good punchs here, as well as direction on your bar and were it was going.
ur outta luck cause dawg, ya writes-dry, u suck, but how the fuck am I supposed to be "straight" wit a dude who "likes-guys"/
eh alright concept but its been done before. the punch was sort of weak
uve already blown-fame, ur punches r round, and they never "move" anybody, so thats y cats say u bringin a "stone-game"/
you were trying a little to hard with this bar. the punchs were lackign strength
ur shit is known-as-lame, and this fag thinks hes comin into this battle "original" but cant even think of his "own-name"/
alright ending took a personal shot which was alright

over all you had basic punchs but still needed strength in them over all. Metaphors were alright but you were trying to hard on some parts. the scheme of it was ok i suppose.[/b]


Vote- Yo What Up
Took it with a better verse, better punchs, and metaphors....



Hit this up and ill poll vote. make it honest (really needs to be upped yall)
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113612

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^^^thanx for the vote.....dont forget to poll though.......

UPPIN # 5 !!!!!!!

CMON HOES!!!!!!!

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Punches: Yo, some dope punches, Proof just rambled on about something, i don't remember.
Wordplay: Yo, he had the afraid to shove line, I considered that wordplay
Multis: Yo, had 4 multis about every line, 3-5 syllables each.
Personals: Yo, had the Proof/D12 line, and the made fun of line.
Opener: Yo, opened with a nice personal
Closer: Yo, closed with another decent personal

Vote - Yo What Up

No chance for Proof, one-sided as fuck. Proof, think of a comparison between 2 things to make a punch, think of words inside words for wordplay, just do something besides talking. Wackness Center quickly.

this bitch thinks he's "sweet" but never "made-love", and how does he think hes comin wit hard "punches" when hes "afraid-to-shove"/
ur weak, wack punches played-above lies about bein in love, and how the fuck am i supposed to lose to guy whos askin to be "made-fun-of"/
Best bar from Yo What Up

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