Yo Dat Last Line Maku Got Me Laughin Ha Ha Ha Ha I Aint Votin Puttin Feed Back

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IAM BACK FUCKAH'Z HELL~! NEVA LOOKED SO GOOD

im goin wit killah. ya shit was dope. u had good lines in there. especially the one wit leavin him a quarter black. the otha dude, im not even gonna take time to look at ya name, memorize and type it, but yeah, it was good to, but killah had better flow and better hits. my vote=killah. but since i dropped a vote. think ya'll can return the favor?
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=125828

You Get Murdered Quick Like A Crip walkin In A Blood Area-
You Aint Hard..Like the BoogyMan Aint No ONe scared Of Ya-
Decent Opener, flowed well had a punch couple of similies
Dawg You Wack Kids Gettin Sacked Like A Bad QuarterBack-
u Ebony? Shoot errythin up sept ur legs so you only a quarter black-
Good wordplay, I think maybe a little punctuation woulda made this easier to read
I Can See Ya Ugliness Like Michael Jackson On WebCam-
Merkin You Without Breakin A Sweat Like A Kid With A Headband-
egh, o.k
Da Roads Come To An End Like That Kat Beenie Man-
Kid Perormed at a gay club now he braggin like DID YOU SEE ME MAN-
lol, this was funny- Good punchline, good similie in the first line
You Aint Real Like That Fat Santa Clause Bitch-
You Gettin Devoured quick like a fat kid infront of a Sandwhich-
lol, two solid bars in a row- very good use of similies and wordplay
Like Bat Man And Robbin Im here to save the day-
From Bad Katz like you..Rhymes'll take You Away-
Aint Buffy But This "Bitin" Bitch Is Gettin Slayed-
Like A Tru PLaya.. Ya Rhymes Are All Used N' Played-
Fuck Ma-Ku..I will Make You...SucK My Dick-
After This Battle You Aint Comin Back Like A Magician with bad Magic Tricks
These lines were more basic than the first few, but all in all it was a good verse, I really liked a few bars.

Maku
It’s like Iraq, I kill bystanders if they between us in war//
Your softness is unwanted, like a limp penis in porn//
This I think was a better punchline... It hit harder- flowed just as well
Callin me spreewell, how I’m strangiling you//
If you WERE buffy, you couldn’t slay me, cuz I’m angel to you//
stranglin and angel dont rhyme when I speak- This was a decent attempt at playing off his verse but I think you coulda came a little harder.
It’s an enhanced brain, this lame has came faced with/
Assimilate y’all name, then cause detonation of gay statements*//
This displays the more intense vocab you used in the verse, decent wordplay I like the way you set this punchline up.
unrapeable inmate…He ain’t bustin this back//
Him winnin this one? That’s Lyrical destruction of fact//
Yeah- This verse isn't as witty, but It definately pops - Your punchlines take a little more thought to appreciate which makes it seem more elevated to me, I like it.
You’re a joke so I’m laughin at you//
Rap battery Leaves this bastard as inactive as half of his crew//
Good use of Personal, The setup could've used some work but good nonetheless.
You wish you was titanic, but that ship has been left//
My aim’ll make you fade away, from shots that ‘knick’ you to death**//
I make sure, that this hit you’ll detect//
I could take pictures of ya group pride, but still never “picture you repped”/
The knick you to death was decent, kinda basic but good... I liked the punchlines in these last two bars... I think you just came with a little more vocab, a little deeper punches, and just a little harder... I give this Battle to Maku

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Killah-Nice spit........You came hard and weak with it which means you took this
really by a lil though......you had everything uncluding similies and
metaphores..Balacance was ok.....Nice good murkin

Maju-Came kind of weak....Work on something structure was ok
but work on some thing.....Multies Definitly need more
work.So does similies and metas....But keep elevatin and work on alot
of things
v.KIllah

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